Happiness

Lively spirit of the happiness...

As the curtain rise,just forget every demise
No place for sorrows, only filled with surprise...

Pushing the boundaries
And getting the cake!
Sources are many, which just tends to break..
Tentacles and tendrils
The confusing spirals...
Leaving them all behind
There is no need to hide
The inner one of mine..

Just show it out to them,with shiny bright eyes..
The power of happiness
In the sunset and in the sunrise
It don't fades away
It's a beautiful day.....
It's a...... Beautiful..... Day.....

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

I love a happy poem; especially, when it is well-written, sincere from the heart, and catches my attention in a captivating way … with it's postive message and promise of "Happiness", this one surely has that kind of power in abundance.
Particularly:

As the curtains rise,
forget every demise …
no place for sorrows,
only filled with surprise!

On the technical side, format your verses into quatrains and edit them each for content, as I have your verse-one above, that this piece will shine with the excellence its message and your growing talents deserve.

Thank, you, Dear Little Poetess, for sharing another of your splendid pieces for our enlightenment and joy … grateful hugs to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[wander girl]

Respect Richard Sir
Thank you so much for reviewing. Can you please suggest some good lines to improve this piece.

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Respect Wander Girl

I find this poem to be lovely written, and the perception on life in this poem is very positive and realistic.

[wander girl]

Thank you so much for reading and appreciating my work.... Keep reviewing

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree.
"Just show it out to them,with shiny bright eyes..
The power of happiness
In the sunset and in the sunrise
It don't fades away
It's a beautiful day.....
It's a...... Beautiful..... Day....."
The above lines are true. We must seek the positive hope in everyday of our life. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[wander girl]

Thankyou so much for your admiration.....
Keep reviewing

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Anindita Janhabee]

So nice poetry...
Nice thoughts in here...
Happiness and peace are the only things we seek for in our lives... It is really amazing to read a poem based on happiness. I remember my blog entry about happiness... I was inspired from my best friend Sudeep from his writings.. So I wrote about happiness. This is the second piece I read on the same topic... and it's fab!!!!
Keep writing........ 😃

[wander girl]

Thanks for reading

[Anindita Janhabee]

My pleasure...

[horizon]

a very happy happy fun poetry...rhyming very nice..the aim to achieve is clearly depicted in your writings...:):)

[wander girl]

Thank you so much for reading....

[horizon]

my pleasure