Standards

Standards

A Poem by MattScofield

I got a cute crush, the path was like a boulevard

I got a heart rush, as I was slowin’ down

I got it real bad, but you made it all hard

That smile and that consummate laugh, only one in the town

Caught by your smirking eyes, compassionate for the other guys

You were so neglectful, I wondered when you changed

Your charismatic approach fits you suitably

But you gave me a daunting look, am I too ugly?

I wanna taste your lips like an angel residing by my side

I want you as you are as what it was in my guide

I wanna drown myself in a bottle of your perfume

Your adequate atmosphere blooming in the room

Somehow you too was not approachable

But thou shalt not chicken out for you are so loveable

Things like these do not affect me too much

I want your magic touch, 'cause maybe then you'd want me just as much

A goal for a dream but what do you want?

 

 


© 2017 MattScofield



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Critique: (I got it real bad, but you made it all hard) really - The word "real" doesn’t fit this context
(Somehow you too was not approachable) too were not - the subject pronoun "you" and the verb "was" are not in agreement

Review: This is the kind of poem that makes one think and measure the standards and decide if one wants to abide by them or walk a different path. Thank you for making me think I love when something I read does that to me Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MattScofield

1 Week Ago

THANK YOU VERY MUCH BEAR!! haha I made this piece half asleep. I would like this to stay fresh so I .. read more
Bear

1 Week Ago

Somehow you too were not approachable :~)
MattScofield

6 Days Ago

Very well. Thank you Bear! Review noted.



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I'm not sure I "get" everything you're saying here, but I love your casual uninhibited & sassy way of expressing it. There are so many love poems posted here in the classic sappy way, it's always a breath of fresh air when one is crafted with lots of unexpected kinks & feelings. I endorse your "hick" sounding grammar, as I will often use it too, to get that "countrified" sound (ignore what Bear says below about coordinating your nouns & verbs!) Good job being original (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Day Ago


Critique: (I got it real bad, but you made it all hard) really - The word "real" doesn’t fit this context
(Somehow you too was not approachable) too were not - the subject pronoun "you" and the verb "was" are not in agreement

Review: This is the kind of poem that makes one think and measure the standards and decide if one wants to abide by them or walk a different path. Thank you for making me think I love when something I read does that to me Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MattScofield

1 Week Ago

THANK YOU VERY MUCH BEAR!! haha I made this piece half asleep. I would like this to stay fresh so I .. read more
Bear

1 Week Ago

Somehow you too were not approachable :~)
MattScofield

6 Days Ago

Very well. Thank you Bear! Review noted.
Any road can change one's journey, same goes with journey of life.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MattScofield

1 Week Ago

Wow, that was a good one. I'll make something up about life later haha thanks najam!
Najam Us Saher

1 Week Ago

You're welcome :D

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Added on October 6, 2017
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MattScofield
MattScofield

Iligan City, Lanao Del Norte, Philippines



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