Beautiful stranger

its about meeting that one person who makes life more meaningful than before

I sat still
All i could see
Is the beauty you portray
No,this can't be real
It has to be a fantasy
What a beautiful stranger

Your smile seem to stop the time
I wish you could be mine
But you seems so far
yet i could see you clear
You are too good to look at
What a beautiful stranger

Your face glitters like sunshine
Your beauty another thing words cant describe
Your word an advice to take home
I wish i could know you more
But you seems to be leaving so soon
You are the beautiful stranger

Author's Note

i hope you enjoy this piece

Reviews

[zunie frost]

Your smile seem to stop the time
I wish you could be mine
But you seems so far
yet i could see you clear

i love these lines
i was really attracted by the title of your poem

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. You create mystery and visions of a beautiful stranger. I like the thoughts and good description leading to good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[barleygirl]

Even tho I think you meant this to be a beautiful stranger who changes the narrator's life, I see this as a fantasy in the narrator's head. I've had people put me on a pedestal becuz of my looks (back in my youth, when I had looks!) and it's not a good feeling. But it happens all the time & you've described it perfectly. This is how many people view others . . . seeing only the beautiful ones . . . but not seeing the potential friend that's right there in their lives every day. Thanks for the thought-provoking ideas.

[James]

A nice romantic write, good description with beautiful overtones. But like Shankar Mohan Singh said below, you just need to clean it up a little. You write beautifully, beautiful full of emotion, just need the total package.

[V]

Nice words. Romantic, sort of whimsical in a way. A little thing I noticed: You wrote you seems instead of seem...and the second line in the last stanza reads a bit too long to match the flow properly in my opinion. But I like the repetition of the beautiful stranger line, frames the piece in a nice way.

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks vanessa for the review and observation

[V]

You're welcome.

[Merle Van Dee]

Nice piece. Brings to mind how fleeting a sight can be. Enough to write a short poem on better never quite enough to suffice.

[Joe W]

Nice work. I could relate to it a little just because I see so many people that I'd like to meet but never do. Maybe I should change that.....but then again maybe not.

[Shankar Mohan Singh]

As I said previously you are good observer and you have a gift of thoughts a bit work with litreary divices will definitely take you far. Keep the good work going :)

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks for the advice shankar ,am working on that.....i appreciate your review

[Nicole Schuster]

You use simplicity to your advantage here. The concept of someone being so life changing, bringing in such an impact is expressed in just simple words, and I found that so powerful, beyond just the great topic/idea. Nice work :)

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks nicole

[dave mngau]

nice work, I enjoyed reading the poem, coz I could relate to it

[Adesanya Yewande]

thanks dave