Best friend

Best friend

A Poem by Adesanya Yewande
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i don't really see it as a poem but i don't know where to categorize it

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        The more i think of you
        i knew you are not a friend
        but my sister from another mother
        my pains you shared
       my joy you shared
       you have been there for me,
       in my happiest and saddest moment
       You are more like a guardian angel
       a gift from God
       I want to say thank you for being my friend


© 2016 Adesanya Yewande



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Hello there Adesanya ^^ This is the first time I am reading your write and I shall be reading more of your writes in the future. ^^ Now I definitely understand your dilemma of not able to categorize it. Might I suggest just make them into verses and break the long lines and you will have a poem, but that is just a suggestion. Now a very honest, raw to the point and emotive write. I like the brevity of the write as well. Your words are down to earth simple and unadulterated. Just one correction: want to say thank you for "being" my friend not "been" Thank you for sharing I enjoyed it ^^

Posted 1 Year Ago


Adesanya Yewande

1 Year Ago

thanks erenn ,i really appreciate your suggestion
Érenn

1 Year Ago

Wow this reads really I like the flow this poem generates another suggestion I will make since it wi.. read more
Érenn

1 Year Ago

* reads really well
I know how you feel about not knowing where to categorize your work. Sometimes your writing is just between short story and poetry, short essays of feeling or recollections towards someone or something. To me, I would classify this piece as poem, just like FrostyAngel said, a feeling behind your words.
The last verse: should be "being" instead of "been"
Lovely work, keep it up :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Adesanya Yewande

1 Year Ago

thanks kirasoul i will work on that...am not good in poems am just learning and trying but am i work.. read more
Ah! I love this, it's so sweet yet humble and thankful. I can feel the appreciation in it. I for one, don't think a poem really needs to rhyme, it just needs a feeling behind it. This definitely has feeling, so for me it's a poem. So beautiful, well done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Adesanya Yewande

1 Year Ago

Thanks frosty for your review and words

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Adesanya Yewande
Adesanya Yewande

lagos, epe, Nigeria



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am a young lady who loves to read and write,i feel in reading you get to learn much and know more than you have ,and in writing you get to express your feelings and let out your inner though about lif.. more..

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