Elapse in Memory

Cherish your youth, and cherish the present for in an instant it will perish and 'now' becomes 'the past'

How time stands still in the tender instant
Though does it pass, alas, so swift and sure
Anon, we will know it-- lost and distant
Mourn the death to of days, youth cannot endure

With wishes to forever have your hand
Through this pilgrimage to the promised land
Together, we'll outlast that stream of sand
Learning love no one else can understand

Should we not remain and wane worlds away
I promise never to relinquish hope
Though I may not be strong enough to cope
I know you'll make it there yourself someday

But o to see the truth to fallacy...
From in the umbra of my sentiments
How age exposed that foolish fantasy
While lying here, wondering where you went

I search through desert storms to grasp your hand
With saddened absence, madness vast expands
I cannot make it through the squalling sands
I can not take you to the promised land

Author's Note

Thought it was about time I write something happy

Reviews

[Vanesa Markovic]

You worded this oh, so elegantly.
Perfect structure and use of rhyme,
a really fantastic poem Justin!
-VM

[Justin Littlefield]

Thank you again Vanesa
Not one of my favorites, but maybe it'll be someone else's.
I guess that's part of the reason we do what we do, right?

[Sami Khalil]

This was really good . Thank you for penning...:)

[Mike Cole]

I definitely can relate to pictures telling a story. I often get lost looking at a picture and taking in the beauty of a single image, a single moment in time captured in a still memory. Great poem Keep writing!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I see you did a sonnet with this write... I liked the first two stanza(s)... the 3rd did not go well with me... the last 2 lines... may be just me... but the verse is solid... I will agree to that... the theme... in the beginning clearly plays out in this... that caught my eye and kept going...

[Chris]

The first stanza - though it had olde English pretensions - flowed well and kept a very good tone and rhythm. Nicely done.

Stanza three - hurt to read aloud. My mind kept trying to stumble even after three tries.

Throughout - you had the meter, rhyme, and even the content, but somehow the feel, the flow, and the words' tones felt off to me as I read aloud.

[Steven]

Knowing this at 21 is a great asset.

[SyberRose]

Nicely done Justin...yes time flys and your youth is over before you know it...Enjoyed.
Perfect syllable count too...SyberRose

[s y e]

Leaving someone you love is probably one of many hard things we sometimes have to do in life but we some of them remain good, close friends.

I liked this. It was very well written.

[Rhianne Ney]

May, once more, our paths converge-- let us then
Feel as we once felt, live it all again

~ This are my favorite lines ~

Leaving someone you love may always be the thing that hurts someone the most and make them wish to meet again. Besides it was really something to start with. Just proves that human really can't live all by himself-but needs someone to be with them-instead