Another Martyr of Love

A Shakesperean style sonnet, iambic pentameter

O curdling cruor- the source of heart's dolor,

That moldering organ as cold as frost,

Such clotting rot has crossed from crust to core

O scourge, stark torture--must I more exhaust?

Carnivore of ardent swain, the daft swine,

Those guardless rovers of the wanton plains,

How can you lure and skew those true, malign?

O cruel creature--grueling, how heart sustains...

A martyr of love--should thou make me much?

Wouldst after crimson cataracts deplore?

Disgorging gore that may have salved by touch

For comfort such, mortally I implore!

Alas, flames toil--heeding not what has burned

O seraph--thine divine hand must be earned.

Author's Note

Isn't it funny how being good is harder than being bad, just how love hurts more than hate

Reviews

[Reeti]

I am definitely certain that you have studied English Literature for numerous years... most likely, i think you've studied it for your undergraduate degree as well. I've felt that there are very few people who are inclined to write in this classical pattern. I, myself, am always eager to compose in such choice of words.

I admire how you've used alliteration and assonance to frame your phrases exquisitely. Along with the rich rhyming, the imagery is vivid.

Out of curiosity, though i conceive the meaning of all the other words, what does 'cruor' mean?

Anyway, it's an amazing write. I'm glad to find someone bold enough to compose this Shakespearean Sonnet based on the iambic pentameter.

[Justin Littlefield]

Thank you for your review, it's touching. Actually, I've never been in college. I graduated high school four years ago and sort of just have been doing m own thing. When it comes to writing, I learned everything by reading and practicing. I've always admired the masterful, classical forms of writing, so I seem to have gravitated toward that style. But, it's me; it's what comes natural now. Many people think it's outdated and don't appreciate it, but I'm glad to see you do. It's motivating to get such good feedback.

Oh and cruor is like coagulated blood in form of clot lol

[Reeti]

oh, that was unexpected! I'm so very glad as well that classical forms of writing intrigues you. Carrying on like that is most likely to stun people!

ah, so that's what cruor means! It goes perfectly with "heart's dolor" in terms of meaning and rhyme. Impressive! =)

[irishdavey]

Hey Justin! Like you I have a love for the classics. Your command in this style is excellent. Your conveyance of message and meaning is supurb. Well done!

[Dennis A. Clark]

Second place:

Unlike your peers, you take the formal path.
The Bard himself would surely praise your craft.

[s y e]

Woah! Your language is amazing. Wording is amazing. And flow is great. Awesome you got some talent Justin!

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of language. I had to read twice. The dance of love can leave us with a bloody mess. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, why is love this bloody?
But yeah, I agree with what you state here, yes there are times when love just feels so painful but hate is greater actually, because it can kill a person.
Love can rival hate even if it's sometimes painful to love.
Anyways, thanks for the read request since I was able to read a good poem~!

[clairekeown25]

great imagery here, i find your work very entertaining

[Be myself!]

I totally understand. Love does hurt a lot more than hate. Good Job