This Is What Happens When You...

This Is What Happens When You...

A Poem by sherwin
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So So

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Steer clear of the one eyed deer prancing along the edge
Stay clean with what you read in the magazine,better off dead
Play the game and stake your claim, were on cruise control
Hold your breath now take the test, 1,2,3 and lose control

© 2011 sherwin


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Liz
Hmmm, this is very interesting and thought provoking. It makes me feel like there is a hidden meaning to it, that only people who personally know you would understand. Even though this poem is short, it has a nice beat to it and it contains a lot of meaning. I really like how "cruise control" and "lose control" rhyme here. Good job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Simple, direct and full of pun shattering intelligence, well penned, good job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Liz
Hmmm, this is very interesting and thought provoking. It makes me feel like there is a hidden meaning to it, that only people who personally know you would understand. Even though this poem is short, it has a nice beat to it and it contains a lot of meaning. I really like how "cruise control" and "lose control" rhyme here. Good job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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sherwin
sherwin

woodbridge, VA



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i like writing ,playing music, painting. It makes me happy to do these things because of my everyday struggles with certain negative aspects in society. This is how i deal with that. I'm am not a .. more..

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