envy

I will not admit. I do not want to know.

Your thoughts replenish my hive

I would not look at you, I detest your kindness

Your words and you, the lone flower bowed

Yet, each day I help myself to your larders

These excursions are deliberate. I glide by

your perimeter, small as a beetle, intent to

arrive " pluck at your petals, in a daze,

anguished, my sting curls and twitches

 

 

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This was posted 2 years ago. I started here at wc on January 2013. Magkasunod lang siguro tayo nag-join dito, Steph. 😃😃
Envy may cause two possible effects on people: to push oneself to be the best, or to pull down others who would attempt to be better than them. Fine if it will be the positive one.
Great choice of words. Powerful lines.

[highonwords]

thank you, ate dhaye, for the review and visit

my best,
steph

[Érenn]

The visuals you invoke in this poem are very unique (at least for me) But this definitely conveys envy. I like the brevity here. Raw, powerful and it stings.I love the flow your poem provides here. The wordsmithing is good. Thank you for sharing.

[highonwords]

thank you, errenn, for a visit to one of my old poems

my best,
steph

[Emily B]

i used to have a friend and her cabinets and freezers were all full of good things to eat (and mine were not) and she used to complain about having nothing for supper

i know it was envy

[gabrielle]

when we wallow in envy, we'll soon get consummated and sting our own selves. short and meaningful.