I flunk!

~ this was the time when i have nothing to write.... maybe a word play a bit but there is hidden meaning... ;)

 

 

I stare on a blank page, holding a thought

Unconventional imagery

Sub-divisional runway

a road - full of mystery

Signing-in to the puzzling riddle

Choices pops like a bubble

Fading, switching here and then

I rot till Forgotten

Fallen times, running in signs

 

Winter in summer

Cold as stone, I can’t even utter

 

Fragile as glass

String in Brass

Connecting

But suddenly cut

Verses in line

on top, I stop

Ending blank, I flunk !

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see the writer trying to solve the puzzle of the words that are coming in fragments to him...a barrage of ideas, but he can't solve one of them enough to write a piece that holistically has a focus...he is all over the place...

starts one piece, gets halfway through and the inspiration stops..starts another ...same thing

----keeps hitting a wall..

well said.

jacob

[Pax]

smiling ~ your insight is a wonder mr. Jacob.... i keep hitting that wall, my inspirations stop, but my eagerness will not give up... so let's say pen on... grateful with your insight mr. Jacob... thank you very much...

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Sometimes I feel this way. Where in the building of a poem, I lose the original thought and feeling. This reminds me of a poets thought process, but, my friend, you certainly did not flunk. :)

[Pax]

hey my friend, I'm glad i didn't flunk in my poem ~ though i think i did flunk in some choice of my life... though that's all in the past now... thank you very much my friend, its a pleasure hearing your insights...

[Marie]

But you certainly haven't ended blank...your words are heartfelt...

[Pax]

thanks Marie my friend, i am grateful with you always coming and reading my work...i always value your views.... highly appreciated...

[Poussiere D'Ange]

It's one of those poems which you write Pax where you just grab the reader's attention and drown him into an ocean of emotions. Its one of those amazing pieces that you create. Its one of you:-):-):-D.

[Pax]

thank you my friend ~ always a pleasure it brings you reading my poem... grateful!

[Poussiere D'Ange]

:-D:-D:-D.

[Wondering Mind]

I do that a lot too, but haven't been able to write about it like you've done so well

[Pax]

I am honored, your works is amazing ~ that is why i like your works... thank you greatly for reading my work, always a pleasure it brings...

[Shep]

Yea a new poem. And a very good one at that. Not more i can say when others have pointed out . Good job.

[Pax]

thank you my friend... You are always been there, i am always thankful with you reading my work...

[Pete Langley]

We`ve all been here, Pax ...and discussed it late into the night on occasion! The connected thought chains don`t often just happen, I find. There`s no easy answer...just keep pulling the chain is the only way sometimes. Eventually, something you pull out starts making sense...and then you`re away again! P.

[Pax]

I see... i feel it those chains from time to time... answers are never been always that been easy, i guess that's the way it is... a challenge all the way... wow ~ mr. Pete i am grateful with this insight... thank you very much...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

an excellent piece, perhaps about writers block?

[Pax]

yes, those are the times i do write and pour everything and everything under the sun :) ...thank you my friend... you review is valued.

[Terohime]

I loved this poem. A great read, keep up the good work.

[Pax]

grateful & thankful ~ I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem... i highly appreciate that :)

[Terohime]

any time ^^ hope to read more from you.

[Sami Khalil]

"a road - full of mystery
Signing-in to the puzzling riddle
Choices pops like a bubble
Fading,"
Wow. That is so awesome and deep Mr. Pax. You have come at a point in your life where you have to make mystic choices and find your spiritual journey along with your life journey. You want to connect to the source or God( the puzzling Riddle ) for all philosophers call him that way. You are trying your best but the pages you are reading are blank , they don't make sense to you so you want the experience instead of just reading what others have wrote. I could be wrong but that is how I'm interpreting this write.
You rock MR. Pax like they say here in America...:)

[Pax]

i don't want to be repetitive but i can't help it... i wanna say it... err.... "WOW" ~ :D
thank you greatly ~ i see the depth ... the source in the deepest part of our soul... I always believed that in school or box we only learn the basics and what matters to me the most is the experienced learned to do it in real life not just imaginations....imagination is just the foundation, and doing it is the whole package.... you rock as well my friend....

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I totally agree. To me the experience and the imagination is indelible more than mere pages and blank lives...My pleasure Mr.Pax. I like this level of poetry...Pen on...:)

[Pax]

lol~ sorry typo its books not box...
and your right on my friend... your insight always have values..
thanks again..

[Sami Khalil]

I can see you are moving to greater levels in your writes...You are welcome...:)