Baggages

a ramdom thought, a re-edited shout-out. A quote.

 

Author's Note

Perhaps this is how we are as aspiring poets write our way through life and its challenging test.

I write not because I wanted to be a writer, but I write because I needed to release some unwanted feelings.

My words are my imaginings, but I can never deny that I sprinkles some parts of my emotions in it, some fragments my soul lays profoundly naked.

Reviews

[John]

I like the use different font and text size to make the piece more dramatically effective.

Just one grammatical point. Shouldn't it be 'baggage' (an uncountable noun) instead of 'baggages'. Perhaps you have good reason for breaking this rule, though I can't, having read the poem a couple of times, see why.

Thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the paper and pen. Seem people pay more attention to words more than voice. I believe writers must be hard skinned and tell the truth. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Pax]

that is the point on this piece my friend, Thank you so much... always a pleasure to see you my friend give some words of wisdom...

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told the truth. You are welcome.

[Tree]

This is creative, Pax. I'm liking your play on words, too. It also does something visually, the way you set this up. A friend of mine lent me a book, a novel. All through the novel words are crossed out, and sometimes replaced, etc.. It adds a whole other layer of meaning through out the entire book, because now, you see the character thinking out loud, or edititng herself... I see you doing some of that here / too.

Very cool, Pax

[Pax]

thank you so much, Diego, words speaks to us many ways and we play with them too, I am glad you find it cool...

[John Anderson]

Should just be "baggage". Beautiful ink!

[Pax]

thank you, John...

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Very expressive and strong as always! Yes, what we need is to write, sometimes the most loud speech is useless without a proper intonation and without intention to affect. You do that in excellent way. Your writing is also piece of art, combination between deep personality, thoughts, escape and own views. It deserve attention. You touch very sensitive points of writing poetry and meaning of speaking verses meaning of understanding and sharing. It is so bug difference...

{Sugar plum}

[Pax]

ahh.. that's very nice of you my good, good friend... you are very insightful as always... what you just said is true in all experience... thank you, and i am always very grateful to you... hugs!

[Tai Ryens]

Your raw expressions of jumbled thoughts are to your advantage today, Pax, for it invokes more of the feeling I assume you were trying to convey; the restless feeling of dragging along the baggage of something heavy on your soul and the sheer determination we force out of ourselves in bringing our thoughts to fruition via poetry. It almost seems like scattered thoughts lost in the suffocating and constant roaring and rustling of life treading on without you, against your will. Well done.

[Pax]

thank you so much my friend...

[Girl With A Pen]

The expression you have shown is so truthful it almost hurts to read. Thank you for sharing this :)

[NeiL ArandA]

Telling , expressing and showing . Our pen or quill which is the extension of our soul bleeds out and spills over from the cracks of our heart .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i write because i have to.....it is both release and also something i feel i have to do because it is there and i am meant to do it...
when the poetry just comes through us, i am not sure we have a choice but to do it.

jacob