ashen smog

ashen smog

A Poem by Pax
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loneliness has defined

this old soul.
Bittersweet melody
has tuned my way of 
living.

I don't know how much 
my heart could stand
the weight and wait
for that simple moment,
that single spark
to feel alive
and stop breathing
the ashen smog of reality.

© 2016 Pax



Author's Note

Pax
Credits to the photo: smog-free-project-6

"from ashen gray to ashen fields
comes, ashen smog...

do they care if I'm loved?

perhaps I'm too comfortable on my
own space and too confined to be bothered."

thank you for reading,
me...

someday, when i know i've done right
and okay, I'll compile this into a book called:
ashen...

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As your note mentions, I hope you do indeed do a book about your journey. I recall you were one of my first friends here and it has been amazing to read your heart and have insight into your struggles.
Reality...now there's a word...concept...conundrum. I've heard it said that perception is reality...I am not even sure I understand that! With a heart as gentle and perceptive as yours, it would be difficult for you to live in denial of what is. Perhaps, as some say, we must just adjust our way of viewing our reality and all will be well. That is difficult when the wounds of the past are reopened time and time again and life and loves disappoint us...even worse when we disappoint ourselves.
"the weight and wait
for that simple moment,
that single spark
to feel alive" - I love how you use "weight" and "wait" here...it is a weight sometimes, perhaps always...the weight of waiting...wonderfully expressed!
I am just rambling on here as you have touched off some swirling of thoughts about life, loneliness, sadness, and hope for something that "sparks" into action. This is so good. I hope you know I always wish you well, and hope the smog will clear soon...very soon.

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Dear Friend,

I'm always amaze on how you see my heat within the piece... you may call.. read more
Pax

1 Year Ago

ps. love the new pic, you eyes shines beautifully...
Shimmerbliss/CAF

1 Year Ago

I believe you will find what you seek. Best always, my friend!



Reviews

A work of quality stunningly expressed.
Impressive, Pax!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Skillfully and perceptively conveyed.
A very fine piece of work!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

glad to be back my friend,
happy to see you haven't lost your talent.

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Good to have you back my friend....thank you, 👦
sometimes feeling alive is much better when waiting for it, instead of forcing for it to happen...very believable words here

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Thanks, my friend. ...
Poignant and descriptive , we all know the feeling so well. You captured it so well in all its nuances. Lovely write as usual.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Thank you, moon,..,
I am familiar with this feelings.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Thank you Captain....
Wonderful feelings flow through this,though they are sad,I can relate to these emotional thoughts;-

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Thank you, much, my friend....
I relate too well to your journey here, these ashen places of isolation. Powerful reflective words. We too often wander through these dark, lonely places. Learning to try and find the light on the other side, so I find my way home. One day.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Thanks, my friend... you say it too well and understand it too... the ashen places of isolation, too.. read more
So many senior citizens are lonely. They are forgotten by family and friends have moved away or passed on. They still breath, but are they still really alive? They have no joie de vivre. Well written. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

1 Year Ago

Thank you my friend.

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