Curse Of Lost Soldier

A gathered army

moving thru the woods

on the trail to victory

until it was only loss

a general a false call

lead astray

confusion

claimity

diversion

ambush

tho right and just

murdered upon the sunny trail

by those closes to him

torrment

dispair

misery

for an eternity

to always be appart of these

lonely hungry woods

he is still

waiting to kill the

enemy of the world

beware he holds

your life in his hands...

Reviews

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I really like the style of this poem. It flows every nicely and gives a good insight into what is going on. I like the idea and how you ended the poem. Thank you for sharing.

"tho right and just" --- tho should be though.

"by those closes to him" --- Closes should be closest.

Torment only has on r, not two.
Dispair means to take apart two things; you want Despair.
Apart is spelt with one p, not two.
Other than that, there are many commas missing. but this could be because of the strutcure of the poem and is author's preference.