Beautifully Sadden Eyes

Spoken:

A soul twisted

Torn in time

Longing for love

A whispered soul

Saying hello to you…

Sang:

 

Heed unto the trees

As the dew glistens

Rain drops

Liquid sunshine in a heart

Radiance a soul listens

Tears rain no more

Rainbow of smiles

 

She has the beauty

She has the brains

Her personality is untamed

Yet her eyes weep

Tears of sorrows

Grieving a heart she seeks

Untrusting of new eyes

Chorus:

What goes on in that head of hers?

Is it a playmate she seeks,

Or a friend to confide in,

Or just some one to hold

Her beautifully sadden eyes

Speaks to my heart

Telling a devastating tale that wants a happy ending

Pulse quickens

Shortness of breathe

Stole the look of beauty

Her soft cheeks a caress

Emotions a raging river

Just to tell her

 

Chorus:                            

Her beautifully sadden eyes

Speaks to my heart

Telling a devastating tale that wants a happy ending

 

 

Shyness has driven me to

Write the words I could not say

The sun rise with your smile

Filling the emptiness inside me

Wanting to help find the happy ending

Vanquishing the sadness you feel

 

 

 

Chorus:

What goes on in that head of hers?

Is it a playmate she seeks,

Or a friend to confide in,

Or just some one to hold

Her beautifully sadden eyes

Speaks to my heart

Telling a devastating tale that wants a happy ending

 

 

 

Spoken:

…My beautiful sad eyed woman!

 

Reviews

[Morgan Ashire]

I've seen this style before, but just reading it off of a page can not do it justice. I hope that someday this can be recorded and I will be able to hear it in its entire glory.

[Lexy]

This is an interesting format, starting spoken than turning into song. Good job!!

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This is increadible! It is very beautiful. I loved the syntax! Perfect choice for all the lines. Great work! It made me sad as I read. Very good!

[Kristin Brecoe]

Nicely written.
I only have two suggestions for you:
Her soft cheeks a caress
Emotions a raging river [this is more of a question...why did you use a?]

The sun rise[sunrise]

-kristin

[Vatsayayana]

If my eyes don't deceive me that's Chloe (Allison Mack I believe is the actress' name???) from Smallville.
Still to this day, as much as I love Lois, if Clark had just gotten with Miz Chloe instead of Lana... ~sigh~ I would have been much happier throughout those FIRST seasons.
Ahem.... Moving on.
This is beautiful. I love the separation of the words. It gives each sentence a strength of character and gives the reader a truly deep glimpse into the eyes of the one who speaks the words of adoration to this woman. (Whew! What a long sentence.) You see the beauty of the woman. How sad she is, how weary her soul is, how she yearns... you also see how wondrous she is. How truly beautiful she must be. Her strength. Her gentleness. What a soul! What a SOUL indeed!
Going back to the actress, if it is indeed her, I always found her stunning. Even through her tears, her smile was blinding. She was so strong, always pushing forward, though tired, she never quit.
Stunning work here.

[Lady Ellen]

A sweet sadness this tale. Very nice indeed!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Just lovely - those eyes - have so much to say and yet they are mysterious at times...you have captured this so well - lovely song - I would that I could hear it performed.
Light,
Siddartha