Elucidate

i am trying something new, abcdabcd, dcba, abcdabcd thats the order of the lines and how they flow together... enjoy

Elucidate

By Windstorm Kells ©2009

 

Sundering heartbeat

Emotional literalism

Creates that of history

Corruptible intolerance

Ideas breathing passionate heat

Thundering literature realism

Words surrender to our quarry

Fabrication strips our intelligence

 

Governments breed ambivalence

Honor besmirched without parry

A maimed world of materialism

Pufferies are the libeling treat

 

Man’s fallacious biocidal feat

Bewildering seedy barbarism

Leaden promises of redemption in purgatory

Even if condemning our souls with ignorance

Defilement of souls distorted compleat

While chided for our individualism

Humbly stand with wisdom as its glory

Actualize decision on reason, not imbalance

 

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Something tells me religion/politics is involved... lol...

This was a unique read. The rhyming scheme isn't what I'm used to, but I sure loved the content you've got going on here. I feel like this is about the chains of mankind--religion. I'm not yet sure if this piece favors religion or not, but I get the feel that it is not favoring religion, considering some of the verses that happen to stand out.

Your poem is certainly a thought-provoking piece. Somewhat of a tongue-twister of a thought! Excellent work!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Sorry it took me so long to get to read this. This sounds like there is a lot of politics involved and how our world seems to be going to day. While I am not used to reading this type of poetry rhyming I thought it was quite a good read and enjoyed it. Nice work.

[Mr. Misanthrope]

VERY intriguing poem. While the theme of the poem, that of governments and corruption, could not have been expressed any better, the unique style of the poem only helps to create a sort of suffocating feel, a military order which restricts and heightens the senses.

Well done!

Luke

[Sarai Akscyn]

You took on a monumental task ... trying to poetry politics. I found it too dense in form. I love the second stanza ... I think it could stand alone.

[Anata]

tought provoking, intelligent, original and well written... amazing :)

[Ralphy]

This is an impressive write and as I follow your logical path I realize that your mind is quite displeased with the current administrations and how we then to follow a "Jones Analogy " instead of forming to our own individuality..steping up and speak for ourselves. Your choice of precision selected vocabulary, allow you to say in a short poem what it would take many words to say in a story. Although, by the title, "Elucidate" to make clear, I felt that, this was far from clear, consisting I use a dictionary to discover what you so cleverly have written.

Beautifully done.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

So deep, that I had to wait to read it one day, because I was sick and exhausted, and I wanted to sit and savor each line when I felt healthier. Each line, on its own, has depth, and propels the next. Def for a deep thinker, one who likes intelligent poems. This one rings loud and clear. Excellent job.

[Doug]

i think that it is very intellectually written, but that the flow is a little choppy. that said, it is very thought provoking. nice work.

doug

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A moving and wise work. Thank you for sharing this. There is much to be learned by your powerful and succinct pen.
Light,
Siddartha

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

Great message, wonderful write I like this. It has a sense of chaos to it that I think fits it's theme perfectly. Good job!
Brightest Blessings and Warmest Wishes,
Rhiannon