Requital: The Crimson Path

Vengeance. Nothing you haven't read before.

Bloody hands

Drip upon these sands

Icy wrath

Carved this crimson path

Calamitous eyes

Disregard their pitious demise

Kind heart

Did long ago depart...

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Kindred dead

Each in their bed

Soul shattered

Obliterated all that mattered

Vengeful quest

South North East West

Destitute inside

Love and comfort denied

Obscuring dune

Foiled by Vali's boon

Rage then

Unleashed upon wretched men

Effulgent axe

Struck in frenzied attacks

Mindless beast

Corrupted by pain unreleased...

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Red earth

These men's eternal berth

Yet torment

Still does not relent

He stands

Amidst the drifting sands

Soul downcast

Gazing at times past.

Author's Note

Vali is apparently a Norse god of Vengeance and Rebirth.
I was aiming for the first pair of lines in each stanza to be rooted in the physical world, while the second pair address linked, but more ethereal matters.

Reviews

[The Papermate Pen]

this is kind of a dark poem, to wut i could understand. [rite???] (my vocabulary is very limited). "Calamitous eyes/Disregard their pitious demise" strong wording there and throughout the poem. the imagery of the poem seems quite vivacious and lively.

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Wow, this is wonderful. Such a dark path to walk. I like it. Also within your words I also found some truth. I enjoyed this immensely!

[Andrew Scorah]

an exellant piece of work, loved the imagery

[bbb]

I think this would be a great poem to put in a story. Or you could simply write a story based on this, and include it. Really great descriptivism, nice work!