Bleed

Stab me slow, watch me bleed

is it my pain that you need

you stabbed me in the back

and then walked away

and here I stand still bleeding today

I don`t know why you hurt me so

I don` know why you turned so cold

you closed all doors,you return my mail

do you enjoy putting me through hell

Do you really believe those lies

you didn`t even ask me,i was surprised

do you really know me,i don`t think you do

if you did you know I`d never be untrue...

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

I'm a fan of leaving the poem 'hanging' like this at the end - it sounds like a lonely echo when that's done and the lack of refrain (I would have been tempted to throw one in there) also adds to the impact I felt.
One of your best mate.
:)

[wordman]

thank you very much mr jordan, it kinda happened that way,lol,sure wasn`t smart enough to plan it

[Tony Jordan]

best writes (in terms of connecting on the heart level) are those instinctively penned I find

welcome Matey :))

[DIVYA]

Love and trust are instinctive, happening even between strangers. It's regrettable and sad when a loved one is not trusted. Such a poignant read.

[wordman]

ahh ! it`s kinda fun being jealous,,thank you

[Tracey~]

It amazes me that in love we still have levels of mistrust. I don't know if it's how some are brought up getting to see or feel what love is for them or what. There are differences for sure. I happen to be an all consuming love, which leads me usually to pain lol.. You penned the emotions very well.

[wordman]

thank you for your visit,i think love has it`s moments of pain

[Einstein Noodle]

very lyrical ..seems it could easily be put to music ..and i love Red and their rendition of the song .. good stuff ... the break up ...the pain ..the tears ..all there sir! :(
E.

[wordman]

thank you my friend

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

The pain etched in these lines is palpable Ron....another great write!

[wordman]

like a country music song,with the pain

[jeannemarie coulter]

trust lost with harsh words, or cruel actions...can this trust ever be regained...

[wordman]

lol,just one of my silly poems,i hope it`s not true