Rainy Night in Georgia

Rainy Night in Georgia

A Poem by wordman
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Color me gray
as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul

I guess 
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul

You see 
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...



© 2017 wordman



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A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jesus & Gypsy Soul

1 Year Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

1 Year Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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I can totally appreciate this poem in every feeling of love I've had. Your emotion comes out in this very touching piece. Well done!

Paul

Posted 5 Months Ago


 wordman

5 Months Ago

thank you for the visit paul
Rain hides our tears:)
This is a well penned poem and a very touching one!
Thank you so much for sharing!

Posted 5 Months Ago


 wordman

5 Months Ago

thank you for reading
Neetha

5 Months Ago

My pleasure
Sadness expressed by rain. I like progression of soul to heart. The change brings attention to the repetition.


Posted 8 Months Ago


Shannon

8 Months Ago

For those of us who live more in the intellect than feeling side, you could fix the 'I' S...
 wordman

8 Months Ago

nah,it drives intellects wild
Shannon

8 Months Ago

Lol. #$@%/*&§¿!

You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...




you touch the nerves of everyone ever fallen in love
beautiful lines, last 4 lines are unforgettable

Posted 8 Months Ago


 wordman

8 Months Ago

thank you for the visit,i appreciate your review
Sir I Really Enjoy This Romantic Piece Of Art By You With Rainy Scenery.....

Posted 9 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 wordman

8 Months Ago

thank you sikandar,i appreciate your reviews
I simply love the rain. I simply love the realization and regret at letting someone special go. I also love the rythm and rhyme.

Posted 9 Months Ago


 wordman

9 Months Ago

thank you,i appreciate your reviews
DIVYA

9 Months Ago

You are welcome :)
Holy sausage !! The number of reviews and views -
sorry - how shallow of me but - very well done Wordman!!
Its amazing how a good song can open those word-glands and let the poetry flow.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

what by Randy Crawford?
Ah ya see now, that wasn't on the greatest hits CD ...lmao
 wordman

11 Months Ago

she has a long list,even some gospel
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

I shall fall down her youtube hole tonight with the good headphones on. Cheers Wordman!
This is a lovely poem. The tone is melancholy but still filled with hope. I like the way of your writing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


 wordman

11 Months Ago

thank you for reading !
A love lost leaves a vacuum of yearning and angst, penned from the heart to sublime effect nice writing wordman !

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you tom !
I really like it.It is short in the right sort of way

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you maria,i hate long poems
Maria12

1 Year Ago

I don't hate then but they can ve demanding.Short ones are harder to write but you have done it well

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