Rainy Night in Georgia

Rainy Night in Georgia

A Poem by wordman
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Color me gray
as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul

I guess 
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul

You see 
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...

© 2017 wordman


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A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jesus & Gypsy Soul

7 Years Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

7 Years Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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Reviews

Beautiful and melancholic
romantic piece nicely penned


These lines got me but
I love this whole piece
because I love rain ☔

You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...



And it's been
raining ☔and Thundering
in Georgia here all week
😊👍 😊

Posted 3 Years Ago


 wordman

3 Years Ago

thank you for the visit,raining here to in tennessee
This love letter is so beautiful. It feels as it's been written yesterday. Feelings are immortal.

Posted 3 Years Ago


 wordman

3 Years Ago

thank you for the visit
Lale

3 Years Ago

It's always a pleasure reading your work
 wordman

3 Years Ago

glad somebody likes it,,lol
This one touches the soul.

Posted 4 Years Ago


 wordman

4 Years Ago

then i did my job as a writer,thank you lea
Lea Sheryn

4 Years Ago

You're welcome. It's what we're supposed to do. Nice when it works.
Clearly you've taken the title from a very popular song, and yet your twist and personal poem here is magnificently put together concerning the feeling of longing that love instils in us.

WELL DONE

Posted 6 Years Ago


 wordman

6 Years Ago

thank you for the visit
Oh how beautiful heartfelt poem
Love Conway and Loretta always have

Posted 6 Years Ago


 wordman

6 Years Ago

thank you miss julie for the visit..
Who hasn't gone through that rainy night?
A moving portrayal, poet.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 wordman

6 Years Ago

thank you for reading,and yes who hasn`t
I can totally appreciate this poem in every feeling of love I've had. Your emotion comes out in this very touching piece. Well done!

Paul

Posted 6 Years Ago


 wordman

6 Years Ago

thank you for the visit paul
Rain hides our tears:)
This is a well penned poem and a very touching one!
Thank you so much for sharing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


 wordman

6 Years Ago

thank you for reading
Zephyr

6 Years Ago

My pleasure
Sadness expressed by rain. I like progression of soul to heart. The change brings attention to the repetition.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

For those of us who live more in the intellect than feeling side, you could fix the 'I' S...
 wordman

7 Years Ago

nah,it drives intellects wild
Shannon

7 Years Ago

Lol. #$@%/*&§¿!

You see
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...




you touch the nerves of everyone ever fallen in love
beautiful lines, last 4 lines are unforgettable

Posted 7 Years Ago


 wordman

7 Years Ago

thank you for the visit,i appreciate your review

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