Rainy Night in Georgia

Rainy Night in Georgia

A Poem by wordman
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Color me gray
as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul

I guess 
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul

You see 
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...



© 2017 wordman



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A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jesus & Gypsy Soul

2 Years Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

2 Years Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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This is a lovely poem. The tone is melancholy but still filled with hope. I like the way of your writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for reading !
A love lost leaves a vacuum of yearning and angst, penned from the heart to sublime effect nice writing wordman !

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you tom !
I really like it.It is short in the right sort of way

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you maria,i hate long poems
Maria12

1 Year Ago

I don't hate then but they can ve demanding.Short ones are harder to write but you have done it well
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Those rainy nights do tune us into reflecting on the could've been's, don't they? Sometimes we need those rainy nights to cleanse our soul, as well as our mind, and see the world from the others point of view. Nicely captured Wordman.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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A well written tale of longing and regret. Well done. A good write

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ted Kniffen

1 Year Ago

45 years selling Ford parts, so I guess I bleed Ford
 wordman

1 Year Ago

i was a ford salesman back in the day
Ted Kniffen

1 Year Ago

A kindred spirit.
Heart breaker of a poem. Put tears to my eyes. Well done.Thanks, for sharing. Eva

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you eva,appreciate the review
The last stanza sent me chills. It was so good.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for the visit !
A very awesome well written write, loved your last stanza

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

you give great reviews,i owe you three
This was a sad piece ... I didn't expect that. Based on the title, I just thought this was going to be about a "Rainy Night in Georgia" -- nothing more.

There are some typos in this piece. I notice that some of the i's are not capitalized.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you william,appreciate your review
Nothing like the rain to remind us of our weeping hearts and that we're longing for that someone we should never have said goodbye to. Indeed it takes a toll on the soul.

A delight to read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you alica for the visit!

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