Rainy Night in Georgia

Rainy Night in Georgia

A Poem by wordman
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Color me gray
as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul

I guess 
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul

You see 
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...



© 2017 wordman



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This is my first attempt at slam poetry, and I'm excited to film a performance of this piece over the coming day.

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A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 1 Year Ago


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Jesus & Gypsy Soul

1 Year Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

1 Year Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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somehow that special person is always remembered when it rains
a relief

well done

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you very much riversided,good to see you !
HansJizzy and ANTO are one and the same. ANTO blocked someone who had never commented on his stuff, at exactly the same time as HansJizzy did.

avoid! avoid!

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 wordman

1 Year Ago

anto is not hans jizzy aka t k little aka david demers,you have one post and one friend
you d.. read more
Great read and thanks especially for introducing me to this song. It's so good.

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Sky
People say love hurts if lost. I feel love really hurts, when its rain falling like skyafall....
Beuatiful Poem Wordman :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you very much !
Great write Wordman. Keep it up

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

and how are you my friend ! thanks
Terrence Chang

1 Year Ago

I am fine and dandy
Returning to ask for a new write Ron. This one was written in December. I'm having withdrawal pains! ~SP

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 wordman

1 Year Ago

i am dried up sharon ! no inspiration ,maybe you could give me a start
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mou
Reflection of a deep feelings..I appreciate your writings..good rhythm with nice flow...

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 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for stopping by !
Very good. Like a love song from years back.

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 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you kenneth
A fine piece of writing Ron, you Southerners realy are hopeless romantics'
Georgia is on my mind in thjs cool melodic poem. Thanks EG

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