Rainy Night in Georgia

Color me gray

as the sky fades to black

color me sad

on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia

takes a toll,

as the rain

falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart

i need you to hold

i need you to touch me baby

touch my soul

I guess 

i should have never let you go

now i feel you sweet heart

deep down in my soul

You see 

true love never dies

and as i stand here in the rain

my heart still cries ...

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.

[wordman]

thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.

[wordman]

just let it come from the heart,break the rules

[Weeping willow]

Beautifully expressed in a lonely way as the rain pours through your soul;-

[wordman]

thank you for the visit my friend!

[kyam]

Oh, how feeling! It's amazing! "True love never dies and my heart still crys" I Love It!! So descriptive!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit!

[DILEEP KANDAMCHALIL]

A beautiful rain.......

What av wonderful lyrics

[wordman]

thank you for the visit!

[Sami Khalil]

I love this song and the poem. An excellent write Wordman...............

[wordman]

sami my friend,good to see you.thank you for the visit!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)..............

[KWP]

awwwww ... a lovely poem - I can just see you lamenting over a nice whisky, drowning in the pains of now and memories of yesteryear X

[wordman]

naa ! not me,

[Miss Sharon]

(You forgot to issue the tissue alert Ron.) This is beautifully written and would make a good country western song I think. ~SP

[wordman]

thank you sharon,i guess this is my genre ,it just comes lol

[Ruth]

Love has a knack of doing that...regrets are always more astringent in the rain :)

[wordman]

thank you ! rain hides the tears

[ms. barrie]

stellar write...I love the use of "color me sad" --
this is very evocative of the perhaps regret at what could of been...
or missing a significant other due to circumstances.
either way, great use of imagery and lyrical flow.
thanks for your gracious comment s upon my writes...
and for sharing - X - miss. barrie

[wordman]

thank you miss barrie !

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, wordman (:

[Woody]

reading this poem, I wondered if it was humanly possible for a departed loved one to resist coming back.
such a moving piece wordman. long time no see.

[wordman]

any thing is possible,good to see you woody

[Melinda McQueen]

I know how it feels to miss someone.
Nice write.

[wordman]

thank you ! i appreciate your visit !