Rainy Night in Georgia

Color me gray

as the sky fades to black

color me sad

on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia

takes a toll,

as the rain

falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart

i need you to hold

i need you to touch me baby

touch my soul

I guess 

i should have never let you go

now i feel you sweet heart

deep down in my soul

You see 

true love never dies

and as i stand here in the rain

my heart still cries ...

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.

[wordman]

thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.

[wordman]

just let it come from the heart,break the rules

[Relic]

This is a sad side to you wordman. The rain and grey skies are something a lot of us have to go through at one time or another.

[wordman]

thank you relic !

[jesserose99]

all the makings of a true blues song standing in the rain with a crying heart. beautiful words wordman, but you always know how to move me.

[wordman]

maybe one day i will stumble upon a good poem i can turn to a song. lol.thank you

[emmajoy]

Just had to listen to that song... twice. Think it needs to be added to my list of favourites for this new year - sighhh. The lyrics are just wonderful, a sadness of words, ripe and appropriate for lovers parted whether present, past or .. who knows. As to the musical phrasing.. isn't it just perfect ... 'to past some time.. ' just stays in place musically and lyrically. Oh my...

Third listen. That exchange at the end? It just wraps the meaning of the song in place and emotion.

[wordman]

thank you emma,a great song for a not so great write !

[emmajoy]

Am I allowed to answer - 'Rubbish?!

[wordman]

a woman always gets the last word,lol

[wordman]

a woman always gets the last word,lol

[emmajoy]

Will copy those words into my new diary and display them as necessary over the year!

[wordman]

and a woman never forgets !

[emmajoy]

No, it's elephants that never forget...

[Tate Morgan]

isnt that the way it always is we lament those mistakes

[wordman]

that`s where lounges came from,lol..thanks

[Tate Morgan]

yeah thats a truth i cant deny

[W R Stowe]

I so remember how songs would affect us especially when broken hearted.Personally I shed many tears while standing in the cold falling rain great work word

Bill

[wordman]

thank you bill ! good to see you

[W R Stowe]

You're quite welcome Happy New Year

Bill

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand this poem. Many of us had cried in the rain for things lost. Great song and poetry my friend.
Coyote

[wordman]

thank you john,i`m sure we`ve all been there a time or two
got the inspiration from your great write will you love me tomorrow !

[Coyote Poetry]

Great music does help us write poetry my friend and you are welcome.

[Pryde Foltz]

A hauntingly sweet piece, Ron:)

[wordman]

thank you pryde,i appreciate the review!

[Einstein Noodle]

"true love never dies" .. your poem is simple in words ..so frighteningly vulnerable ... the reading is smooth as Conway's deep base ... I can hardly tell you how personally this seamless match of song and poem affects me ... so i sit here now a puddle ... it happens every time this song plays .. thank you for this wonderful post ..I am putting it in the ol' library for sure ..
E.

[wordman]

thank you e for the review

[Valentine]

Sure do miss Conway's singing new songs. Love should be eternal. Valentine

[wordman]

hope you had a great christmas ! thank you.