Silence

 

Silence

rolling through my brain,

as fast,

as a fast moving train.

 

Through,

the portals,

of my mind ,taking me back,

back in time.

 

Where

memories run deep,

deep into my soul,

a place,only i can go.

 

like

a waterfall,

falling from my mind,

taking me back, back in time...

 

Reviews

[Angie G]

That beautiful gift u have just keeps on giving Hun!! Beautiful work.

[wordman]

just words,thank you again

[Najam Us Saher]

Creative...Very true and thoughtful poem.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Najam Us Saher]

You are most welcome.

[Farmgirl]

This is captivating Wordman ... I look to see more from you soon ...

[wordman]

thank you,not writing much lately

[Farmgirl]

I noticed ... But, I believe a piece is coming soon ...

[wordman]

i think something is transforming in me

[Farmgirl]

I know it is ... You just have to Let it go & release it no matter how difficult the words are to type get them out so they dont strangle your spirit

xoxox Goodnight Wordman xoxoxo

[LittleBeeKat]

that waterfall never stops running...

[wordman]

you don`t need to remind me my friend,,thank`s

[Island Hippy]

Aloha wordman, a beautiful dreamy piece. There's a real contentment in your words. Lovely read. Izzy

[wordman]

thank you for the visit izzy !

[Mariwel Lao]

Reading this poem made me nostalgic.. simple yet it impacts my emotion.. Good job!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit

[Shannon]

Memories can be double edged sword, regardless they have power that you have captured here.

Are you interested in constructive thoughts as well?

[wordman]

i am open fpr anything,thank you for reading

[Shannon]

The first stanza, the wording trips me up a bit. The repetition feels smoother and more purposeful as the piece progresses. I might try something like:
Silence
rolling through my brain,
fast,
as a fast moving train.

Even taking the one word out works better to my ear.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Very spiritual and peaceful and
I feel the strong emotions in this beautiful
Piece but I'm weeping and crying with
anything sad or beautiful or emotional
because of what I'm dealing with so I'm very emotional. Thank you for sharing my friend. God bless.

[wordman]

may the sun shine on you bringing eternal peace and love

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you my friend :)

[wordman]

my pleasure

[emmajoy]

Four layers of silence, each opening a corner into your spiritual needs perhaps - certainly your day to day life. Silence - if there is such a thing, somehow highlights the senses. You've expressed that in each stanza so fluently.. no shouting, almost whispering.

'like a waterfall, ~ falling from my mind, ~ taking me back, back in time...' Beautiful, a new beginning?

[wordman]

thank you emma joy,i appreciate your reviews

[emmajoy]

I owe you quite a few at the moment and - will call as soon as I can, promise.

[Sarah]

The sound of silence echos in this piece. Excellent!

[wordman]

thank you sarah,appreciate your visit