STUCK

STUCK

A Poem by Amrita

As I step to move on,
I was resisted by our faded love.
I was haunted because your shadow is following me.
I was perplexed with our sweet-bitter memories.
I was afraid of how it would be to let you go.
I was tired of holding you in my heart for so long.

I was lost in the dilemma of your coming back to me.
I was guilty of not being enough for you.
But then
I was hopeful too, to find myself again.
 

© 2017 Amrita



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Amrita
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I like that twist in the final line: 'But then I was hopeful too, to find myself again.'
Love has got to start with the way you love yourself first, with care, appreciation of your own time and space, your high self-respect and self-esteem, and your peace of heart and mind.
That way whoever you decide to invite in your intimate space will see that you had a life without them; yet, since love is reciprocal, you are prepared to be a good lover, when you receive that same love back equally.
With that

Posted 10 Months Ago


Amrita

10 Months Ago

Yes I totally agree with your opinion about love..
Thank you so much:)
This is a very well written write, enjoyed

Posted 10 Months Ago


Amrita

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
A real show of emotions. I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Amrita

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much Rogerh :)
I feel like the writing is so relatable to a variety of different scenarios. Just the loss of someone who used to be a constant person in your life. Good work!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Amrita

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much. I am glad you are able to relate :)
This is a very good write, You write very well. enjoy your style

Posted 10 Months Ago


Amrita

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your time and kind words. They mean a lot to me.. :)
Kymberleigh Kaye

10 Months Ago

not a problem
"I was lost in the dilemma of your coming back to me."
My favorite line of this piece.
I love the way you formatted the stanzas, created a beautiful picture in my mind.
Keep writing!


Posted 10 Months Ago


I feel like this sometimes, but eventually, you just have to decide to let go and move on. I think the poem is really nice. I would like to see more :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


Amrita

11 Months Ago

Yes, I totally agree!
Sometimes you just have to move on!
Thank you so much Avia :)read more
Reading this, it feels as if I am STUCK in the back-and-forth considerations of such a tough decision, the one we all face sooner or later: "to leave or not to leave?" I love the way the ending expresses a tentative hopefulness, not enthusiastic, but willing to give life & oneself another try.

There are 2 awkward phrases . . . I'll list them if you want to make any changes . . .

"I was afraid of how letting you go" . . . might be better as: "I was afraid of how it would be to let you go"

"I was tired to hold you in my heart for so long" . . . might be better as: "I was tired of holding you in my heart for so long"

Posted 11 Months Ago


Amrita

11 Months Ago

And changes has been updated. I hope now it sounds better :)
Thanks a million :)
barleygirl

11 Months Ago

Thank you for considering my corrections . . . sounds even better now!
Amrita

11 Months Ago

My pleasure :)
Yes, hope is essential to regain strength and find yourself again. I loved this poem, it had truth and great transformation of one self in the end.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Amrita

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much Najam :)
Najam Us Saher

11 Months Ago

You're welcome.

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