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Words do leave..

Words do leave..

A Poem by Amrita

With the wings, they escape my thoughts.
With a coal,they burn my imagination.
With a dagger, they stab my soul.
With a burden, they crumble my hopes.
With a scream, they exit my  veins.
With terror, they make me weak.
With silence, they make me deaf.

Yes, they did leave me.



© 2018 Amrita



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Amrita
I appreciate your time. Feedback is wholeheartedly welcomed :)

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Powerful poem keep it up.


Posted 6 Months Ago


Amrita

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
I like the straightforwardness, compacted with deep, clear, simply put, natural and precise metaphors.

Well done!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Amrita

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
WOW! This is very powerful & full of creativity! I love the specific details you choose for each line, each one a surprising way to say what you're saying. I love the intensity you convey in your word choices. Words can definitely be a weapon or a caress! Love the way you put this together with much originality (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


Amrita

7 Months Ago

Margie, I feel honored to hear appreciation from you.
I want to thank you from the bottom of .. read more
I love the parallelism in this. It is composed well, and is a strong piece. I enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Amrita

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much friend. I am glad you liked it :)
Awesome, very well presented, you expressed each one as it would feel. Awesome!!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Amrita

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
I love the repetitive sentence structure of this piece, and your word choices are spot on! However, I am a little confused on how the title relates to poem, "when words quit", so far (correct me if I'm wrong) but the words are what are leaving 'with...' and 'they' are what make your life feel difficult and hard, but with the title you are implying that the words are leaving of their own accord. Is that correct? Because if so I fully understand your piece, if not I'm just a bit confused.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Amrita

7 Months Ago

The title 'when words quit' shows how they leave me when I want them the most to express myself and .. read more
Amrita

7 Months Ago

And yes there was correction in the title.

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Added on January 16, 2018
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