AMIDST

Do you realize

those eyes are still hunting for your glimpse..

those ears are still perceiving your silence..

those lips are still pleading for your presence..

those arms are still pretending to hold you..

those heartbeats are still skipping their peace to you..

those conversations are still yearning for you to end them..

those promises are still waiting to be kept by you..

those meetings are still questing your devotion..

those moments are still limping for your love..

those feelings are still pondering about old you?

Author's Note

I have ignored punctuation as I want to make it more deep..
I value your time and review. Feedback are wholeheartedly accepted :)

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

I like the poem for its depiction of feelings of longing
(which can also be interpreted as nolstalgia for love lost).
I like the introduction line 'Do you realize...', which sets the tone and rhythm and flowing motion with sweet emotion in each line with momentum to the last line, making the whole poem a rhetorical question.

[Kesha]

I like the themes you choose...curiosity and affectionate

[Amrita]

Thank you so much Kesha :)

[PandaPeaceful]

Honesty sticks to your words like glue. The pain, the loneliness, the simple want for something which lays in the past, is quite beautiful. I mean this in the sense that, in a way, as repetitions unfold in your poem, you are still recurring the events which led you to feel this way. Because of this, I greatly admire the structure containing repetitions. Because, once you love someone, you never forget them. They have been burned in your mind with seal. A gorgeous piece. Thank you for sharing!

[Amrita]

Thank you so much .. I really appreciate your words..! :)

[PandaPeaceful]

I really appreciate yours.

[barleygirl]

Even tho your overall structure is somewhat repetitive, the reason this works is becuz each line is very well crafted with a unique idea & dynamic language. The reader is reminded of some situation in life that is meaningful & includes these refrains of longing, which may be different for each reader. Your originality is important when writing about love or lack of love, becuz this topic is much written about & such poems can tend to sound similar. You've struck a strong memorable note here (((HUGS))) Fondly Margie

[Amrita]

Thank you so much Margie..
Love
Amrita

[Najam Us Saher]

Questions are framed up very nicely.
Often the one whom we secrectly look for doesn't realise it.

[Amrita]

Thank you so much Najam :)

[Amrita]

I am glad you liked it :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome :)

[Just Kim]

NICE!! VERY NICE!!
Love the repeats of the word "Still"
Very nicely set up and expressed.
Awesome!!

[Amrita]

I am so glad you liked my poem.I feel honored that you added my poem in favorite list..
Thanks a lot dear :)

[Just Kim]

It was a very good write, enjoyed it a lot.