AMIDST

AMIDST

A Poem by Amrita





Do you realize

those eyes are still hunting for your glimpse..

those ears are still perceiving your silence..

those lips are still pleading for your presence..

those arms are still pretending to hold you..

those heartbeats are still skipping their peace to you..

those conversations are still yearning for you to end them..

those promises are still waiting to be kept by you..

those meetings are still questing your devotion..

those moments are still limping for your love..

those feelings are still pondering about old you?

© 2018 Amrita



Author's Note

Amrita
I have ignored punctuation as I want to make it more deep..
I value your time and review. Feedback are wholeheartedly accepted :)

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I like the poem for its depiction of feelings of longing
(which can also be interpreted as nolstalgia for love lost).
I like the introduction line 'Do you realize...', which sets the tone and rhythm and flowing motion with sweet emotion in each line with momentum to the last line, making the whole poem a rhetorical question.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


I like the themes you choose...curiosity and affectionate

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amrita

12 Months Ago

Thank you so much Kesha :)
Honesty sticks to your words like glue. The pain, the loneliness, the simple want for something which lays in the past, is quite beautiful. I mean this in the sense that, in a way, as repetitions unfold in your poem, you are still recurring the events which led you to feel this way. Because of this, I greatly admire the structure containing repetitions. Because, once you love someone, you never forget them. They have been burned in your mind with seal. A gorgeous piece. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Amrita

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much .. I really appreciate your words..! :)
PandaPeaceful

1 Year Ago

I really appreciate yours.
Even tho your overall structure is somewhat repetitive, the reason this works is becuz each line is very well crafted with a unique idea & dynamic language. The reader is reminded of some situation in life that is meaningful & includes these refrains of longing, which may be different for each reader. Your originality is important when writing about love or lack of love, becuz this topic is much written about & such poems can tend to sound similar. You've struck a strong memorable note here (((HUGS))) Fondly Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


Amrita

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Margie..
Love
Amrita
Questions are framed up very nicely.
Often the one whom we secrectly look for doesn't realise it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Amrita

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Najam :)
Amrita

1 Year Ago

I am glad you liked it :)
Najam Us Saher

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :)
NICE!! VERY NICE!!
Love the repeats of the word "Still"
Very nicely set up and expressed.
Awesome!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Amrita

1 Year Ago

I am so glad you liked my poem.I feel honored that you added my poem in favorite list..
Thank.. read more
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1 Year Ago

It was a very good write, enjoyed it a lot.

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Added on January 18, 2018
Last Updated on January 18, 2018

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