End of the World

last line inspired by T.S. Elliots "The Hollow Men."

Let us fly.
The damned and the deprived crawl their way from the depths
Let the grand rays spill over the desolation and abolition
Watch the incubus children ambush and demolish
Watch the succubus women with their carnality and filth
Watch the hellcat men with thier brute potent power

Let us cry
Among us they slither
Through cracks in the profound chasm of our world
The deterioration of terra firma
Of rock, stone, shale, and gravel.
A land gorged with calamity and apprehension.

Let us die
Untained yet crimson
Branded like cattle, heared and patrolled
Stranded in solitary, speak yet never regarded
We breed, we abide, we self condem, we perish
A man in the delerium of his age said
This is the way the world ends, not with a bang but a whimper

Author's Note

Comments are always welcome. Poetry isnt my strong point so im working hard to improve it.

Reviews

[THE BLACK SEAL]

the imagery is good. i do think you should go ahead and let the cat out of the bag and imbelish it a bit more. not that it is bad. it is not at all. i just think that you could go ahead and go the whole 9 yards with it

[Y.F.]

Is this really the end of the world?
Sounds like just another night in LA (*shtigi-dish*).
And now for the serious part:
It has some really interesting imagery in it, and I really enjoyed reading it.

[An owl on the moon]

Brilliant! So powerful in your imagery and explosive in your delivery. Hard to believe you need to try hard to improve anything. Really amazing, Steffi!!!

[Melissa]

I really like the poem it is so true. If you want some tips on poetry you can message me.

[thecoolone52]

dude i really liked it. The cattle line was my favorite in the poem... and the last line about going out with a whimper instead of a bang was very cool too... nice work i enjoyed it!!!!