Forest Nymph

Just a Dream

In the dark of night

my mind turned on bright,

with thoughts of you

my forest nymph.

Slender and tall,

with wings transparent

and light.

Lifting you up to explore the night.

Flitting here and flitting there

your flight so fast

so no one sees,

for my eyes only.

Coming to rest after long night,

reposed on my bed

me holding your head.

As I give gentle kisses to my forest nymph.

Reviews

[JayG]

If you're going to rhyme, then rhyme. And if you do, you need to work on prosody. An occasional rhyme, here and there, without pattern or attention paid to cadence, only detracts.

It would pay to read the excerpt from Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled, for his observations on language and poetry.

http://www.amazon.com/Ode-Less-Travelled-Unlocking-Within/dp/B000YFE8D6/ref=pd_bbs_1?ie=UTF8&s=books&qid=1222571976&sr=8-1

[Willard Wells]

Thanks for stopping by and with my writing for the most part what you see is what you get. If it rhymes great, if not, works for me. If there is a mix, it still works. My writing is generally very fast. I am not a craftsmen of my poetry for the most part.

So maybe I am just a hack writer. That also works for me. Appreciate your time.My thoughts on my writing or anyones is that my words bring an emotion, smile or laugh. From the other comments received, I have reached my goal

Peace out!

[Valentine]

Don't you hate waking up from some of those good dreams? Valentine

[Willard Wells]

Well I write of dreams, but my dreams are all in a waking state. I seldom ever have memories of my dreams at night. Thank you for taking time to stop by and leaving your words.

[Michelle Gent]

Beautiful. What a wonderful tribute.

[Willard Wells]

thank you for your kind words. Appreciated.

[Michelle Gent]

You're very welcome

[Cryingkate]

Oh My.... See if I flutter to your bed again, You Kiss and tell :-)

What a fun journey. and what gentle sweet kisses

[Willard Wells]

Lovers never tell. Thanks for reading and commenting.

[Cryingkate]

Really was and is my pleasure. I really enjoyed the light flight. and the crafty, creativeness

[Willard Wells]

I am very glad you enjoyed it. Thanks,

[gabrielle]

This is such a sweet write. The last stanza made me imagine a father coming home from work giving his wife a good night kiss.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you and I like your thought on father coming home. I am sure some Freudian could analyse and break this down to metaphors, but it is just a dream work. Appreciate the visit.

[andrew mitchell]

An enchanting love story of the forest Willard. I wish we did have fairies and the like in our forests maybe then we would not destroy them.!

[Willard Wells]

Or maybe the fairies would defend them. Thank you for visiting and leaving your words.

[andrew mitchell]

If only man got some of his own medicine back but not where i live!!! ;)

[David Scott]

Enjoyed this experience Will. Utila, here I come! :)
When I was a young man I used to spend most of my free time exploring nature alone... I imagined "she" was always with me.
A beautiful write.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you David. I appreciate the visit and the kind words. I did enjoy writing this from Idea to completion.

[Echoes of Eros]

These thoughts enchant magic and light from the atmosphere. It is dream fabric coming to life, and how gentle and beautiful it feels to the touch. So well done my friend.

[Willard Wells]

thank you and I just added the flute as mentioned below. I appreciate your kind words.

[A hare off]

Absolutely dream like. Your poem touches deep these fantasies of fairies and nymphs frolicking once the sun sets. I hear a pan flute playing in the background as I read.

[Willard Wells]

Thank you for your time and you have me thinking of adding a music piece with a pan flute. Appreciate the time spent with my work.

[wordman]

love is in the air,sweet kisses,gentle nights

[Willard Wells]

thank you wordman. I see it that way to. Thanks for stopping by to spend time with my words.