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Cracked

Cracked

A Poem by Luna Evangeline

Fingers sweep along a trembling thigh,

A sudden whisper of a flame setting my soul on fire

Satiny hips underneath a gentleman's rough-skinned hands

Quaking

A flower in the wind

Rocking

Riding stormy waves

A connection like no other, an unlucky woman finding her peace,

A blessing that Fate slipped into my pocket like a bit of spare change.

There is no other like us when we're together

Our passion is unmatched

I am his fortress and he, my lighthouse.

 

Feather-light touches, lingering lips,

Tiny explosions rushing through my heart,

Filling me with long-lost warmth.

 

But there's something cold.

Something hard. Unrelenting.

Left hand, the one that caressed

While the other one rubbed,

Fourth finger.

Glinting in the darkness of my bedroom,

Flashing in my guilty eyes.

 

A token of something deeper

Something I am breaking apart.

It brushes my skin as he touches me

and I shiver. It's cold as ice.

I almost wish it could melt away.

I should be ashamed.

I'm not.

He'll keep creeping into my bedroom. He'll love me,

not her. I'm the beautiful girl (other woman)

who blinds men with passion.

I'm the crack in a failing foundation,

Waiting happily for it all to collapse.

 


© 2013 Luna Evangeline



Author's Note

Luna Evangeline
The last stanza needs something, I think. Any thoughts? Thanks for reading :)

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Nice! A woman and a married man. I don't think it needs anything. I like it just as it is.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

4 Years Ago

Thanks hun. :)
Justaguy

4 Years Ago

My pleasure!
I enjoyed reading ...a mistress waiting for the man to leave his wife for her...waiting for his marriage to collapse...If you were to change anything...maybe take out beautiful woman...just add other woman...Rose

Posted 4 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

4 Years Ago

Will do. Thanks dear :)
This is twisted hahahaha I love it! The last stanza sits well where it is. And I do agree, it is interesting that you rote it from the 'other womans' perspective it has a nice, original feel to it, it's not been done befor ethat I have see, so its new to me and I enjoy that immensly. As for the writing itself, I like your word choice and how you phrase things, how you lay down the foudation of the stanza really reads nicely. All in all, a well written piece. It's sensual, sexy, seducing, just a lovely read. :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

4 Years Ago

Aww thanks love :)
I think it last stanza is perfect if you leave it. interesting that it's from "the other woman" point of view.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Luna Evangeline

4 Years Ago

Thanks deary. ((:

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