Once

For my best friend. I really can't wait to surprise her with it.

Once
There lived a heart so delicate
A mind so eloquent
A soul so divine

Once
She stumbled and crossed my path
We grew stronger and stronger as our time passed
And now her soul is connected with mine

Once
Have I felt so cherished and trusting
My damaged spirit combusting
In these bonds set so deep

Once
For once I must show her the same
Take it not like a game
But something forever to keep

Once
Were there roots set inside of me
From eternal stability
Blossomed the dazzling, vivid flowers

Once
I must show her how crucial she is
How quickly I'd fade if she didn't exist
How lost I become in our indispensable hours

Once
There lived a heart so delicate
A mind so eloquent
A soul so divine

Once
She stumbled and she found me
And somehow she
Was rooted deep inside

Author's Note

Just tell me what you think, please. Don't just give me compliments, give me advice.

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

This is really touching, and I'm sure your friend will love it! I love the rhyme scheme; it's very creative and it gives the poem a nice flow. There are just a couple words that I might suggest changing, though.
"How fast I would fade if she didn't exist." The word 'fast' finds pretty nicely here, but 'quickly' would be more grammatically correct.
"How lost I get in our indispensable hours." The word 'get' is weak, and normally there's a more fitting word out there. Maybe 'become' or something like that?
Also, this is just me, but I found it odd that you said her mind was 'so adequate.' It fits well rhythm-wise, but the adjectives in the lines above and below are so glowing--delicate, divine--and in the middle, it's not as complimentary.

[Short.Nerd]

I like this. It was really sweet and it had a nice flow. I'm sure your best friend will lov eit. Keep up the great work :)