Are you looking for me?
Im the one standing alone. of course.
If you ask my why, ill say i prefer to be alone,
to think, always thinking...
But thats not entirely true.
Though i dont want to talk to just anyone,
i wish that someone special would come talk to me,
that you would come talk to me.
tell me a joke, and make me laugh.
Let me look into your amazing eyes,
make my stomach do flips.
But you never come....
instead your standing with her, talking to her, making her laugh.... And so i get what i want, im left alone, to think. to think about you wrapping your arms around her and telling her you love her, thinking about how i wish that was me.... and so, im left alone, left to feel my heart break.
I wouldn't say that this is my favourite piece of yours, but I think that this is written pretty well. I could relate to this poem, and I thought that you chose the right words and sentiments to portray the feeling of having to stand back and watch the person you love, love someone else.
~PaperHearts
It's not easy standing back and watching the one you like with someone else. You're emotions are expressed well throughout the poem and is something many can relate to. A great piece. Nicely done.
This is wonderful I thought. Deep stirring emotions of
envious longing (been there, felt that). Makes one hope
a wish could come true; or the one whom is longing finds
someone that will make the other feel that longing in return!
A little "two can play that" kinda thing but in a nice way! lol
overall, written fairly well with the exclusions of some spelling errors...to be honest, the beginning didn't draw me in--so maybe some editing ?? not bad though, last line made me frown (and i hate frowning!! ) lol
good job
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