Two sides & one story

Two sides & one story

A Poem by XO Nonie

There it is
A light blue sea
That stretches miles away from the shore
Not knowing where it exactly it starts or ends
You smile because for once you feel a sense of relaxation and joy
I want to give you everything my dear
Because I get everything in return
The sun plays peak-a-boo
With the clouds that don't really know what they want
You know it won't rain because this day is perfect
You look back and see your life long partner walking towards you
Baby girl wrapped around him looking as if she had just woke up
Baby boy running to his momma arms wide open knowing momma will catch him
And before I know he has leaped into my arms
Husband laying a quick kiss as if, IF fast enough the kids won't notice
We all look over the ocean
And nothing could be more perfect


There it is
A light blue sea
That stretches miles away from the shore
But whats that
Its not joy I feel 
Its disgust 
Disgust at the sight, and mad at the world
The sun is covered by this dark cloud that in seconds begins to light up the sky
In a way that sends shivers down your spine
Fears in your mind and makes even the Gods angry and scream
I close my eyes knowing I've caught the eye of the storm 
And try to picture the beauty I once had, or imagined I had
I almost hear the steps behind me and before I knew it
I jolted my eyes open and turned around
Turned around to nothing but a house starring back at me
To nothing but the clouds telling me to take shelter
The waves kissing my toes telling me if I stay eventually they will over power me 
And as I walk back in this dirty circumstance I can't help but cry
But I can't help but turn back
Looking at the Ocean
And realizing nothing is perfect 

© 2016 XO Nonie



Author's Note

XO Nonie
I understand this is in the format of a poem, resembles more of a story but please give me feedback on the content! thank you

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This poem is very inspiring. it reminds me of moments that used to be happy memories, but over time those same moments have become dark, and saddening moments. I enjoyed the first part, but the second part really grabbed my attention. I like the unique format as well.

Posted 11 Months Ago


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Anonymous, this piece has touch my emotions. It has brought tears. That which is, that which was and that which will never be. You have revealed this perfectly. I am in awe, you rock.

Sheer Terror

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"I close my eyes knowing I've caught the eye of the storm
And try to picture the beauty I once had, or imagined I had"

These were the most powerful lines that I read here. It is often sad to know that nothing in this world is able to be perfect, but who said life would be? Life is meant to give you a challenge, a chance for you to fight for what you want, who you want in life. It's okay if things don't turn out the way you expect them to every time. I feel that's the beauty of it...every day is a chance to start over. A chance for you to have a different, possibly better day than the one before. Everything doesn't have to be perfect and nor should you try to rush everything in order for them to get achieved. Life takes time...but it's up to yourself to be patient and take that time to improve whatever feels most broken.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is very inspiring. it reminds me of moments that used to be happy memories, but over time those same moments have become dark, and saddening moments. I enjoyed the first part, but the second part really grabbed my attention. I like the unique format as well.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The poem is true. The sea so damn beautiful and so powerful/dangerous. I liked the opposing thoughts in the poetry. I believe. Respect the sea and know how to swim. The ocean is a kind friend. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hi Nony, Very novel way you potray this poem, I really liked it.....there's always two sides to everything in life and it really comes across effectively.... I felt warm & fuzzy one moment..then it suddenly changed to concern....good job!



Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The idea and its presentation are interesting.
The first section gives a happy picture. But the second section puts us in confusion, is it of two different time elements or of two different perspectives or the first one is imagination and the other one is reality.
Your idea of using the words two sides in the title and presenting the write in two sides, from two angles is interesting.
I enjoyed reading this..
Thanks for sharing


Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Two sides One story. This left me thinking are the two a couple? One mate happy and the other miserable? Like the first part best. Valentine

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Just note: "disgust" is spelled wrong in 2nd part
I love the way 2 different people can have different perspectives while seeing the same thing. The only thing that confused me, is that the two parts are describing different weather, so I don't know if it's 2 different times of day, or two different places. To go along with the title of "Two Sides, One Story", I think each part should be told from the couple. The first is obviously happy, the sun is shining, and the kids are there, and it's wonderful. The 2nd part could be tweaked just slightly to describe the same scene, but with a vastly different outlook. Instead of beautiful shining sun, it could be glaring. Instead of a cloudless sky, it could be a blue desert. Instead of having fun carrying the baby, it could be yet another burden to carry.
I do like the idea, and I think it's very creative and a good look at how 2 people can have vastly different experiences in the same story.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I so love how you play with formats. This was a gorgeous idea. Perfect postcard life versus, the alternative.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow you have captured both sides sooo good! I love how the first one is so colorful and the second not so much. I love how dark the second one is. Love it, great job on this one!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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