His "Incomplete" Story

They met when they were young, He must have felt something in the heart

I guess it was destined by then, They were never meant to be apartSlowly They became friends, Still boy was shy although

Feelings in him were increasing, Girl was not getting it though

 

Then they got separated, and it was hard for the boy to accept

Their schools were changed, They lost the remaining contact

 

Boy was waiting,  For some miracle to happen

He just wanted his childhood love to get return

 

God heard his plead, His prayers were heard too well

They met after almost 4 years,  Like some sweet ending novel

 

Now he thought that its time, Time to express his feelings

Feelings that were hidden since last 7 years, Dying to get out in the opening

 

He was collecting his courage, Every bit of it that he was holding

To tell her what he wants to from long time, To tell about the dreams he was crafting

 

He thought of writing a letter, A letter to be bearer of his love

Praying that everything will be fine, God will be watching from above

 

So one fine day, When it was raining slowly

He sat down writing, Thinking of the sweet events gladly

 

He wrote down all that was in his mind,  All things that reminded him of her

Right back from the start, When the things were so much sweeter

 

Letter was now completed, Only thing left was to deliver

Emotions were overflowing,  But no one knows what was there for him after

 

He finally sent the letter, His dreams were so serene

Only thing he wanted was to let the girl know, About his feelings yet unseen

 

He requested the girl in letter, That if her answer is no

Please dont break away with friendship, Let all the hurt be swallow

 

But something else was on her mind, Left a message for him in the morning

She simply said goodbye, Leaving his love filled heart aching

 

Boy was shattered, His love was torn apart

Only thing now left were memories of him and her in his broken heart

 

But I know that his love is damm true, Too much for her to forgot

His love will surely bring back her, No matter what

Reviews

[DeletedUser]

So sad, yet so heartwarming. I can certainly relate, for i've had a love like this once. Great work:)

[light and ashes]

Beautiful, I love the way you ended it with a nice cliff hanger but giving us a hint that is going to work out :]

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Awwwwwwwwwwww! That sucks, poor boy awww! Well, its true and real happening which makes this really relatable to other people. This was a great poem I absolutley loved it. Made me sad, but it was like can't stop reading, just a few mistakes:
"He just wanted his childhood love to get return" it should be "He just wanted his childhood love to return"
"To tell her what he want(ed) to (for a) long time, To tell about the dreams he was crafting"
Other then that the poem was great what a sad ending not everyone has a happily ever after these days. :P

[Teri B]

I like the optimism of the last stanza..."faint heart never won fair lady", after all! :)

[Black]

i love the 3th stanza,
its a quiet wonderful piece
nice work

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God heard his plead, His prayers were heard too well
They met after almost 4 years, Like some sweet ending novel

I really loved these lines, somehow they touched me,
This is quite wonderful, love it.