Forevermore

I would die for you. Teen rating for death and blood.

Leaves drift to the forest floor

Swirls of color fall forevermore

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Bewildered and crazed

I would die for you

Nights spent in turmoil and rage

 

I would die for you

 

The altar stands tall , foreboding

I would die for you

The stone is already eroding

I would die for you

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Black roses sprinkle petals through the air

In the silent wood

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Insane workings of a woman gone mad, they say

I would die for you

And like Pyramus with Thisbe

I would die for you

The tears stream down my cheeks

I would die for you

Once so strong, but now so meek

I would die for you

My body lay as a sacrifice on the altar

I would die for you

Blood mingles with tears but I had never faltered

I would die for you

 

The sun sets and my spirit soars

I would die for you

Though what I have done most would abhor

I have died for you

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Leaves drift to the forest floor

Swirls of color fall forevermore.

Author's Note

What do you think about the little insertions of not rhyming stanzas? I created this poem solely for a contest, so it's not my best

Reviews

[deer-heart]

I like the separations and alternations of rhyme + repetition ("I would die for you") with the free verse. It's a beautiful contrast. Very well executed. The repetition of the line "I would die for you" makes for a really powerful statement that is driven home over and over again. Between the rhyming verse and the descriptive prose you really gave me a clear image of the scene, which I always feel is important - it's important for the reader to be able to see what is going on in the writing.

Very well done - for something that's not your best, it's impressive.

[Bugg]

I like the story this poem tells. I think without all the repitition it would be good. Keep writing!

Bugg

[Aly]

I love the ending!
May I ask though, what are the squirly lines for?
^^