Twist and Bend

Today we're at war

yesterday you called me baby

then you say you want me more

why you actin so shady?

 

at night

there's never a fight

you call me boo

and ask what do you wanna do?

 

today you're at the doors

yesterday we were all on the floors

now i'm a w***e?

why you actin so torn?

 

In the night

things seem so right

you hold me tight

with all of your might

 

this has gotta end

i'm tired of twist and bend

New Text Message: "We're Over." Send.

Reviews

[ettorney]

This is a good modern poem. Although the context, love and relationship, is as old as human kind, the word choices the syntax even the imagery is very urban very youth, very street.

The juxtaposition between the feelings and actions happening at night versus the truth of day is a powerful statement IMO about the inconsiderate and mindless drive young men have regarding sex. You say, basically, all good at night I do what you want and then you hold that against me? Well said because I sense no surprise in the writing. The line New text message: " we're over. Send. " shows a mature understanding of what to do with a jerk like that.

Please change "then you say you want" to "then you said you wanted" so the tense is consistent.

Nice write.