The Moment ...

Moulin Rouge.

The lights, the luminaries, the music, the ambience.

Breathtaking.

 

Till it dawns on me.

The din fades away

The lights blur

And the people grow inconspicuous.

 

All I can hear:

My heart pounding.

Running water.

A faint murmur.

Tinkling tapestries ..

Swishing silverware ...

 

Or was it the other way round?

 

The voice in my head says: "Concentrate!"

I wash my face, close my eyes

Rehearse.

For one last time

Before I step out into the Colosseum

Of human curiosity.

 

I walk upto her.

Kneel.

The crowd turns to face me.

The murmur subsides.

Masks of anticipation, wonder, nostalgia surround me.

Sympathy even.

Unsettled by her perfume,

I blurt out a few incoherent words.

My heart skips a beat.

 

She looks at me.

Lends me her hand.

Smiles.

 

An unfathomable feeling overcomes me.

A moment of silent communion with the Creator.

Ephemeral, yet eternal.

 

 

Reviews

[Vartul]

Wonderful! I like this.How do you write so beautiful? Childhood hobby, or perhaps pursuing some course in English?
Whatever it be, I'm a fan!

[Anirban]

Ghyama likhechhish.....Feeling ta ekdom huha capture korechhish....

[An Ordinary Woman]

oh oh I like this! I like the flow, the direction. *A moment of silent communion with the Creator* I think it fits in perfectly. Good job!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! its beautiful..so flawless indeed. The plot has been executed brilliantly here.

[Ujjwal Ankur]

For the most part, this is way above my level of understanding... I'm yet to achieve the level needed to comprehend such pieces, I guess :(

but of what I was able to comprehend, it does give a feel-good factor about something.. kind of a ray of hope in a gloomy background.

I loved these lines in particular:

"The voice in my head says: "Concentrate!"
I wash my face, close my eyes
Rehearse.
For one last time
Before I step out into the Colosseum
Of human curiosity."

Good work. Though, I hope you would also write one day for us mere mortals who have difficulty keeping up with your subtleties. :)

[poetic soul]

My heart pounding.
Running water.
A faint murmur.
Tinkling tapestries ..
Swishing silverware ...

sometimes all you need and want to hear is this...
awesome flow...
got a lil chaotic in the middle but ended well..
nice vocab!
good read....

:) Love,
Krishna

[ZaZa]

I smiled while reading this. The way you expressed the feelings and the emotion was written beautifully. Thank you for sharing. Nice job.