That Way

that way it was.

That way you once held me

The way you stared me cold in the eyes

The way you kissed me gently, I felt that I could fly.

 

That way you talked so slowly

The way you listened so close

The way you whisper warmly, made me cringe my nose.

 

That way you were so clingy

The way we were so close

The way you loved me dearly, the love I've never known.

 

That way you caressed me tightly

The way I should have known

The way we had our feelings, had blossemed like a rose.

 

That way you held my hand

The way you rubbed my thumb

The way you warmed my hands, you had me deep in love.

 

The way I was unsure

The way I truly felt

The way I lied to you, made sure you wouldn't melt

 

The way I wasn't sure

The way I didn't tell

The way you still don't know, I didn't hear the bells

 

The way I felt befor

The way I wanted more

The way it didn't change, made me such a w***e 

 

The way I played the games

The ones I knew so well

The way I did this to you, I should go to hell

 

The way you still don't know

The way I tried to tell

I'd never love so soon, I knew that very well

Reviews

[~Lizzy♬]

The beauty of this poem is in every line that is read here. The emotions throughout the poem blossom to finish at the end. Being a player is a bad thing, but it will hurt mostly you at the end because the guilt washing over you. I know how you feel, I've done it before... I won't ever do it again though.

~Lizzard~

[Christine]

I think it feels like half a poem. I think you could get much deeper with this, maybe by tellling a comparison more. Right now you are telling of good things in past tense, and it sort of made me feel like it was going somewhere. I think you could go from these good things to what it is like now, from past tense to present, and then maybe even future? It would add more contrast to get your point across. A work in progress, I'd say.