Absent Coloured

As of 8/26/08

 I

am animal-like at times.

The plug torn from the socket

that rests in grave-like position

on the floor by the wall, neath

its previously plugged in greatness.

 

Yes

that is what I am

right.............now!

I remove myself at times,

most times,

and chase feelings that I'm

not even sure exist.

 

The violent dry-heave

from the shattered depths

in the mirrors reflection.....

that is who I am

right............now!

If only human-parts could be

           disassembled

and  neatly wrapped, placed

in individual boxes, and put away

for further usage in a better

time and place.....

I'd consider that.

 

I'd consider you,

and exploding in place,

howling and dancing

under half-moon lit skies

where howls are really our

secret inuendo and speak

for our truest nature as

carnal beasts, beasts like us.

 

In actuality,

I'd miss our humanity,

and our passions,

and emotionally stripped

lullabies of Autumn leaves

that fall to our feet to guide

our paths towards a goblin-like

god-head's destiny.......

ours........or something like that.

 

Yeah.......I kind of feel like dancing too,

but only if it's black and white.

I'm not up for straining through colors,

                        babe!

 

 

Author's Note

Spelling of color in title dedicated to Alice.

Reviews

[Rachel DeHart]

"in individual boxes, and put away
for further usage in a better
time and place.....
I'd consider that.

I'd consider you,
and exploding in place,"

I adore those lines... Something about the "I'd consider that./I'd consider you." seriously just catches my heart.
Lovely beautifully constructed poem.

[poet2angels (lynda)]

Beautifully written...
Great imagery
Best of luck in the contest

Lynda

[A Spectacular Case]

I love this and the concept behind it, you've described it all beautifully.

[Nik Dendera]

Oh, that just blew me away! I haven't read anything quite like that in a while!

The flow of it, the heartbeat jumps right off the page, full of brilliant one liners ("If only human-parts could be disassembled") and some vivid imagery.

An excellent piece!

[Just Manoosh]

The first stanza ia a great hook. I could sit and re-read it over and over.

You could really follow your mood throughout this piece, its almost as if we are walking in your head as your thoughts are being processed.

Yay for the correct way of spelling colour.

An excellent write honey.

Mx

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Hey Mr. Mike,
You are supposed to box up the parts and ship them to the North Pole so they can sit on ice a hundred years...
This is great. I read it out loud. I like how the words sound. Ah, rudimentary my dear Watson... my comment that is...