The Girl Behind The Curtain

The Girl Behind The Curtain
by
Jose M. Euvin

She hides behind that screen
Not wanting to be seen

Her feelings are protected
My heart she has neglected

She's the girl behind the curtain
Scared to be rejected

My heart she holds at hand
Scared to let me in

The girl behind the curtain
My heart she has forsaken

How I've loved the girl behind the curtain
Even though our eyes will never meet
My heart she took from me

Reviews

[Rainbow Rider]

A beautiful, from the heart, write of both self love and pain, precieved happiness and sorrow.

One thing though, the two times you wrote 'Scare' it feels to me you wanted and should have said 'Scared', but forgot the 'd'.

Also in the last set, the word 'love' should be 'loved', if you meant that you have loved her. Otherwise, if you are saying you want to love her, then you would want to change the word 'I've' to 'I'd'. It works both ways, just depends on how you intended it to read.

Thanks for the read request, this was an insightful read. ,,,,Mhk Melvin

Beautifully written though, tender and wrenching at the same time

[Roach]

I like the sense of mystery going on here. I can see this in a literal sense of language, but I can also see it metaphorically.

To me, it talks about being on guard with your heart when you feel it might be in danger, like that moment you're about to tell someone you love them for the first time and you don't know how they're gonna react. Then when you don't tell them, it's like it just crushes you when they didn't even know how you felt. Just my thoughts and what it made me think about. :)

I would maybe mention her title (Girl Behind the Curtain) only once. Just my opinion.

Over all, I could feel the emotion, the honesty, and the heart. I enjoyed reading it.

[melissa]

This is an amazing poem I loved it a lot I hope to read more of your poems and stories

[imm's place]

Wow, captivating, like the way you did this, mary

[Anastasia]

A great read! Very easy flow, very direct message. I loved it!

[Unique Expression]

For me. what I like, and find personally interesting about this, is that I can see my self as both the girl behind the curtain, and the one whose heart has been taken. - Something very poignant to me at present, and I feel that the fact that it resonates with me in this way shows that there is a poignancy to what you have written, and how.

I was also surprised by it's direction, as on reading the first two lines, I was immediately expecting a poem from the perspective of someone who is scared to be seen, and wishes to break free from that, and in a sense it is. However, it is from the perspective of the one who looks on, and sees all this, and wishes they could be let in.

Ummm, powerful, and I think potentially challenging to those like me who have/can live 'behind the curtain'.

[DeMorney]

this sounds like a struggle. however it is lovely...

[Kellee]

Simply beautiful...

[Eponine Roy]

a poem of longing and a poem of not wanting to let go, the duality of the piece is what is interesting to me. the two sides to the story: the feelings of fear and longing seen from the eyes of a boy pining for a (more than) shy girl, whom he reads as "scared" of rejection or to let herself be his. very nice.

[Mary E. Green]

I like this. It's quite common for one to be afraid to open up and let someone in... very nice read.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

This seems like a pining piece. Though, she seems more afraid to love than the male. Its usually like that, no? I like the honesty in the piece, and yeah, the girl behind the curtain....I bet if the guy struck up a conversation with her, I bet she'd slowly open the curtain and let him in.