A moment

Poem inspired by a sunset i witnessed

 

Just before the sunset

There is a moment I cherish

When at the ocean

After a long day of fun in the sun

Time with family and friends

There is a moment the sun sits

Above the horizon

Peering across the vast waters

On a backdrop of amber

There is a moment I am mesmerized

Staring at the perfect circle

Smaller than usual in the distance

Forgetting to squint

There is a moment the rays of sun skip

Off the choppy waves

Glinting and sparkling into my eyes

Creating a lane of gold

This is the moment I cherish

When this explosion of light

Is laid before me

Like a path to heaven

This is a moment that lasts forever in my mind

As a breeze licks my face,

 I’m given a glimpse of hope

A thing of beauty

A moment I cherish

Just before the sunset

Author's Note

Just please tell me what you think. I'm still pretty new to poetry, so criticism/encouragement is welcome! =)

Reviews

[Anjel]

this is very good. your descriptive words make it more then just some normal sunset poems i have read. well done.

[Molly M]

i like this Jake

[Grace Lea]

Jake, i love this. Totally and absolutely. Its the perfect way to talk about the sunset, you've said what we all think of when we watch the sun go down.

WELL done! :)

[DRIVEN]

I am not a critic, I know what I like however and your poem brought images and feelings of peace to me as if I were standing beside you looking at the beautiful sunset on the water...therefore, this was lovely to me..thank you for sharing

[Samuel Dickens]

Your poem is full of vivid imagery and easily understood, which is how I like them. I think you've done a fine job and should be well pleased with this.

[Poeticpiers]

Beautifully descriptive carrying a clear message A pleasure to read couched in well written poetic prose. Being an old fashioned traditionalist I must comment that without metre it remains prose Rhyming I like to use but it is not necessary for poetry to rhyme but meter is essentail