I dream of you

I dream of you

A Poem by lawrence bear

A struggle I give into


Last night

I dreamed of you.


My heart

It ached.

How I yearn

For your affection.


A flame

That once


Now lay


I try

To stir

And rekindle

To no avail.


I am invisible,



I no longer exist.

Cast away

I am adrift.


On the ocean


Your heart.


A raging sea,

Fighting to stay



I reach for

Your hand.



Its grasp.


My sails

Have torn,

No paddle,

No life jacket.

I am losing,



The waves

Overcome me

I drown

In the emptiness

Of your heart.


Forgotten maybe

I will

Never know.

I am dead

I lost

My soul.



The abyss

I go,

A struggle

I give into.


The darkness

Welcomes me,

My body

My soul

Slowly fading



Last night

I dreamed of you.


© 2013 lawrence bear

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lawrence bear
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My sails

Have torn,

No paddle,

No life jacket.

I am losing,


I love those lines
neat work I look forward to reading more

Posted 8 Months Ago

I stumbled upon this again and realized I commented on it two years ago. I just wanted you to know that I am still drawn to it and I still love it!

Posted 1 Year Ago

lawrence bear

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much. :)
Deandra Dawn

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome!
So touching
And so lovely
And simple

Posted 3 Years Ago

Very darkly dreary free verse, Lawrence. The cascading, spiraling down effect of the format you've chosen fits nicely with the poetic narrative, that tumbling, falling look you've employed. A-h-h-h-h-h, that abyss. I've teetered precariously on the edge myself a time or two...

Excellent work. Keep writing!

Posted 3 Years Ago

I absolutely loved this. The format, the flow, the words...so strong and to the point. Love love. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 3 Years Ago

This goes beyond the ordinary. Feels expansive in its message.

Posted 3 Years Ago

lawrence bear

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your review Mary
Oh, my friend, it pains me to know that you know the depths of this despair, the pain of feeling alone in the world while lying next to someone who used to love you. I have no words fo conslation. The way you wrote this put me there, with you, back into some memories of my own that are almost too painful to bear. Masterful, and hauntingly beautiful. Thank you for sharing the gift of your vulnerability with us.

Posted 3 Years Ago

lawrence bear

3 Years Ago

Thank you Marie, glad you liked it.
Pain went into the writing of this poem and so it emanates from it to the reader. Simple and devastating

Posted 3 Years Ago

lawrence bear

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your review.
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Wow, nice poem...I felt Ur rift in it...good job:)

Posted 4 Years Ago

lawrence bear

3 Years Ago

Thank you audrey :)
such sadness and deep emotions spill forth from this piece....nicely done

Posted 4 Years Ago

lawrence bear

4 Years Ago

Thank you Fran. :)

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Added on February 28, 2013
Last Updated on March 1, 2013


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lawrence bear

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