After Dark - Chapter Ten

After Dark - Chapter Ten

A Chapter by lawrence bear

Dead Aim...


As he gets close to the hill over looking the valley, he pulls on the reins to stop his stallion. He looks in confusion to where he left the boys. He can hear them rustling about, but where? A tree, they are in the tree, and he looks intently to a big dark shadow below them, is it a bear? Or is it the wolf thing? Using the moonlight, he pulls out his gun and c***s it.

Good thinking boys. he thought as his finger rests on the trigger aiming at the beast.

“Come on baby… look to poppa.” He whispers looking down the barrel.

© 2010 lawrence bear

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A interesting situation. Beast or not. Time to find out if can die? A very good short chapter. Thank you Lawrence for sharing the excellent chapter.

Posted 1 Year Ago

lawrence bear

1 Year Ago

Thank you coyote. I look forward to your reviews.
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I will be back ASAP. I always enjoy your tales.
Lawrence I like it. Do check to make sure you use the same tenses from the start to the finish. You have two in this chapter :) Not picking on you lol I had mom read it over . . . I hate having her do that to mine as she picks it apart, but in this:
Good thinking boys. he thought as his finger rests on the trigger aiming at the beast.
thinking is present tense and thought is past tense :) I think maybe you are just brainstorming so fast that you aren't thinking about the tenses. I do that too lol

Posted 7 Years Ago

Sure hope that's a Paso Fino stallion he's riding lol. They were bred to be calm. Be bad to get dumped at this point. I like it.

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Added on August 26, 2010
Last Updated on August 27, 2010
Tags: fantasy, thriller, horror, suspense, mystery

After Dark


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