The Bitter End II: Sweet Returns

The Bitter End II: Sweet Returns

A Chapter by Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)
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This is a poem answering the poem The Bitter End by Nini

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Dear Stone that I have left behind
The Wine has fermented, I cannot lie
Stars are but rocks I've placed above
They land on grounds reached only by doves

But as that day my stone carved soft
Realizing late what you were speaking of
I decide to return slowly, melting away
As from stone I have been sculpted back to clay

More lips planted on this stained cheek
My heart I've twisted to remain meek
The clay melting, rubber I became
As love slipped away from my true aim

It was you I knew, It was you I want
And now made rubber, with lighting I have fought
Though it brought no pain, out came the tear
Of leaving you as stone and alone in fear

Now breaking the gum I melt once more
to reach you as Man once and for sure
Though your heart made stone allow me to break
Pressurize it to diamonds for you to keep safe

I swear my love, another one I will make.



© 2017 Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)



Author's Note

Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)
Please read the poem before this inspiration: The Bitter End by Nini

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I really like this line

More lips planted on this stained cheek

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)

4 Months Ago

Thank you very much, kindly and humbled
I read both the poems and I think it's a wonderful contrast. Especially loved these lines:

"Stars are but rocks I've placed above
They land on grounds reached only by doves"

Beautifully crafted. Makes me think when will you cease to amaze me with your talents... :P
Loved reading this :))

Posted 7 Months Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)

7 Months Ago

Thank you for grasping those lines
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

You're welcome, Sire 😊😊
A epic journey in he words. I had to read again. I like the story told and the open ending and the promise. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Months Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)

7 Months Ago

Thank you Coyote, its been a while since Ive stopped by to pay you a visit
Coyote Poetry

7 Months Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Very bitter indeed. Love the use of rock and clay.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much for the humble review, make sure to read my fellow poets poem as well for a much.. read more
Excellent job! A poetic voice speaks out loudly yet softly declaring love... The last line was very impactful in the context of the poem. I liked your word choices too, and I went to check out the poem by Nini to understand where it came from because I didn't know anything about your poem at first... Very beautiful write... Well done...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 10 Months Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Im glad you checked out the other poem for understanding
This is such an incredibly good poem Drift! Well done!

Posted 10 Months Ago


"Dear Stone that I have left behind
The Wine has fermented, I cannot lie
Stars are but rocks I've placed above
They land on grounds reached only by doves"

COME ON NOW!!! That whole allusion in comparison with how Nini described it in "The Bitter End" is breathtaking! The charachter in this has matured over time and you can really embrace the growth they're experiencing. I love how you restart the cycle stone, to clay, to rubber. A brilliant analogy and imagery!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse (Y.A.D.)

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much for taking a look at both pieces to fully understand this response to an excelle.. read more
QuayvonS

10 Months Ago

Of course, it was well done!

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