Frozen

Frozen

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Based on a true story..

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Eight years back. That was when it started. Just when I thought life had nothing left for me. Just when I thought that I could never ever make friends. You came. Do you remember that day? I still can't believe it. That I could have got someone like you. 
You were there standing oblivious to the fact that someone afar was noticing you. And then I found out you and I had things in common. Like the likings for books. I was awed. I'd never met anyone like you. We started talking. I became more and more involved. It was like you charmed me into believing in you. You cast a spell. 
But then I did the unforgivable thing of hurting you. I thought I would never see you again. The pain, the agony I felt.. It was horrible. Do you know I attempted suicide? But you wouldn't know.. I hadn't the courage to tell you. But you, ever the sweet person that you were, forgave me. And we started from where we had left. 
I thought everything would be like it was going.. Only to be made a fool out of time again. You had to leave. For good . And forever. And all the reasons I'd given myself for staying with you crumbled. Just like that... 
What had I gained from your friendship? Trust yes, I did learn to trust only this time I wasn't sure if I could trust again. I know it has been my fault. It made me feel vulnerable. To pour out all my emotions unto you. Too weak. But I did. And that has cost me alot. I'm not the same person I was when you were here. Yes, I talk, laugh, joke around, try to be happy.. But you know why? Or that how much time it took for me to gain this carefree attitude back? No, you don't... 2 years.. After you were gone.. I wasn't myself.. I cried.. I prayed to Allah to give you back to me. That we could be together again. That I could hear your voice again.. Your voice which gave me life. Which saved me from drowning. And then.. Things turned my way. You came back.. Not the physical form.. You contacted me online. I could only be grateful. Like the weak person I am. I ask myself..why did I let you get in too much. Why hadn't I kept you at a distance like I had done with every other person who came my way..I get no answer. Just silence. Is it the fate's way of making me realize that I'm not as strong a I seem..that I am as weak and vulnerable as anyone canbe..I do not know... And then I made the same mistake again.. Of letting you in.. Dropping my guard.. Telling you everything that troubled me.. Oh, yes you are a wonderful listener and you did give me great advices which worked. It wasn't as if you didn't let me in too.. You did.. But it seems I'm stuck.. You moved on..like anybody and everybody else. Maybe its because I never found your replacement and you found mine... I was too naive to think I was the one for you.. And now look where it has landed me into? Its like I'm in a void waiting to return in the real world.A world where you don't exist for me anymore.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Oh my, I think I will have to stop my reading here. This is just so much to swallow in, the opening of such gates and then flooding my screen with such words, I have no idea of wht to say about such moments. and knowing it was all true? Drea Yumna, can I just speak nothing?

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

This was true.. But re a friend I had..
Seems like you got 'frozen' by my words, Sire...



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Oh my, I think I will have to stop my reading here. This is just so much to swallow in, the opening of such gates and then flooding my screen with such words, I have no idea of wht to say about such moments. and knowing it was all true? Drea Yumna, can I just speak nothing?

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

This was true.. But re a friend I had..
Seems like you got 'frozen' by my words, Sire...
The most important thing for good writing is stark honesty, especially self-honesty. That's what makes this a very compelling read. The way you lay yourself out to be completely transparent & vulnerable . . . not many writers can do that as openly as this. Even tho there are rough places in the structure of your writing, it doesn't matter becuz what you're saying is so powerful becuz of your extreme honesty. This sounds very conversational, like you are really talking this out with yourself (alone). It's intriguing becuz in places you answer yourself, as if you're having both sides of this conversation in your head.

My only tiny complaint is that the writing is a little too general in some important places. You don't tell us any details about the reasons why the break-ups happen. It's not that you have to go into detail & describe everything. But it would be good to at least give a glimpse of what happened. How did you hurt this other person? We are left feeling a little bit too curious about what this all means, how it all played out, even tho you've been very clear about how it all feels.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

The curiousity part was left intentionally because I didn't feel comfortable sharing that.. But you .. read more
Oh wow.. This is beautiful!! So relatable and capturing... Keep up the good work.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for liking this piece! Glad you could relate!
It's touching... Nicely presented..

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for liking!☺
Pretty story of urs😉 i like it

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you...
What heart rendering story when a love has gone but it cannot be replaced. The idea of being stuck or frozen is aptly described.
Good Luck.
Ian Chris.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the kind words and wishes, Ian! I'm pleased to know you liked it ☺
A really sad and powerful story. But beautifully written! Trust me, when the right time is in, you will find someone wonderful! Until then, keep writing :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the kind word, Gullia! It means a lot ☺
Giullia King

11 Months Ago

Any time :)
Really sad story and beautifully expressed with words which gave me the feeling of the pain...
Love is always painful..
A contract to have pain..but that's the creative part of god that we accept that pain.

Nice work :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Yes indeed! Its nice to know you could feel the pain here.. Thank you so much for liking and reviewi.. read more
The young feel more like this than the older person who has been through love and loss more than once. It is just a growing experience to help you finally be able to choose the right one for yourself. There are plenty of fish in the sea. Valentine

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

I agree.. With every passing day, life brings us lessons.. Thank you for the kind words.. Means a lo.. read more
A wistfully sad story... It's hard to find good friends who listen and understand - eve harder when they move on. You capture the essence of the relationship and the loss of parting with simple dignity and strong feeling...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Yes indeed.. I wish I had the courage to move on too.. Thank you for your kind words.. Really apprec.. read more

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