Falling

Falling

A Chapter by Closed
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All people are equally good.. Sometimes we aren't good enough to keep up with them...

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Holding on to strings 
Hoping that something good will happen 
Thinking you'll be my salvation 
My saviour 
The reason for my being alive 
Uptil now 

Such delusions 
Will tear me apart 
Don't you think? 
Its just a figment of 
My imagination 
(Maybe you are too) 
That you are here 
Watching me 
Get along 
With whatever difficulties 
I face 

Instead, you 
( and that's what I think) 
Gave me a push 
Now I'm falling into this 
Abyss 

And there you are 
Laughing 
Your heart out...



© 2017 Closed



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I believe there is always hope even the slightest glimmer. I also think we have a greater ability to determine our destiny than we think. Sure certain things are just what they are but for the most part we can turn the tables. Thoughtful writing Yumna. I enjoyed reading. R xo

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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1 Year Ago

I agree on that point.. But there are certain times when it seems the tables have turned 'on' us..read more



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Are you still falling in the same direction?

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Closed

9 Months Ago

No I think I have fallen already...
Optimistic yet pessimistic. I like the spareness of the verses, good poem! Really like those last three lines too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Closed

1 Year Ago

Yes, that's like we are most of the times, right? Hanging on to hopes while really dreading what's c.. read more
Lovecraft

1 Year Ago

No problem. Those last three lines really do well as an end to this poem.
Closed

1 Year Ago

That's so nice of you ☺
I believe there is always hope even the slightest glimmer. I also think we have a greater ability to determine our destiny than we think. Sure certain things are just what they are but for the most part we can turn the tables. Thoughtful writing Yumna. I enjoyed reading. R xo

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Closed

1 Year Ago

I agree on that point.. But there are certain times when it seems the tables have turned 'on' us..read more
If only superman was there to help at the jumping point. Alas it turns out to be the joker. Life, who would have it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Interesting thought! I like your take on this one! Thank you! ☺
We hope for the best, yet we fear the worst for a reason, because without hope only leaves us hopelessness. Even in the lowest pit of despair, we hope to find a way out.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Yes.. I quite agree with you.. Thank you for the kind words ☺
Lorry.

1 Year Ago

You're 'welcome :)
I think we often blame others for 'pushing' us in a particular direction but I imagine we have more control of our destinations than we give ourselves credit for. Still, there are some out there, who do their best to manipulate the roads we take in life and sometimes we are not lucid enough to see it. I really like where this piece takes me.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

Yes I agree.. Because in actual its our weakness that makes someone push in the wrong direction.. Th.. read more

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