How It Feels

How It Feels

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay

I have never known 
how it feels to get drunk
to lose your senses
and forget your worries, 
at least for a moment or two

I have never known
how it feels to fall in love
be with the person who could 
make me forget who I am
at least for a moment or two

I have never known
how it feels to be betrayed in love
have my heart crushed
my soul ripped apart
at least for a moment or two

I have never known
how it feels to feel emotions
being a cold-hearted person that I am
to sympathize, to comfort others
at least for a moment or two

But seeing the countless people before me
who wished the same as me
and they got it too
makes me feel that I'm better off like this
at least for a moment or two.....



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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"But seeing the countless people before me
who wished the same as me
and they got it too
makes me feel that I'm better off like this
at least for a moment or two....."

I really like this stanza. It's low, but you wove in some hope. Sometimes that's all you need, and this illustrates that well.

"at least for a moment or two" - the use of this throughout really pulls it together, and also lends credence to the temporary nature of what you're feeling. That things will/can change.

Well done.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you! Yes, the feeling that everything is temporary is what keeps me going.. I'm glad you liked.. read more



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It seems there is alot you wish to explore into, but be careful and make sure you are with the right people, as this can be very dangerous to face alone

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

oh yes I think I found the right ones lol :p
"But seeing the countless people before me
who wished the same as me
and they got it too
makes me feel that I'm better off like this
at least for a moment or two....."

I really like this stanza. It's low, but you wove in some hope. Sometimes that's all you need, and this illustrates that well.

"at least for a moment or two" - the use of this throughout really pulls it together, and also lends credence to the temporary nature of what you're feeling. That things will/can change.

Well done.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you! Yes, the feeling that everything is temporary is what keeps me going.. I'm glad you liked.. read more
Beautifully written. I wonder too, which is the better off, the one who knows love or the one who is unaware of the pain it can bring.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Interesting insight! I think not knowing is a blessing 😉
Thank you for liking and reviewi.. read more
The world will happily go on without bad behaviors. Trust me. Great writing. keep it up.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

The world goes on with bad behaviours too. There is so much more that it can take.. Life goes on no .. read more
Very well done, I like this piece. The ending is great, really frames the whole poem.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much Todd! it means a lot :)
You must have known something!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Lol seriously.. You think I'm that evil 😂😂😂
Jibey

11 Months Ago

Just subtle
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Err right....
True, sometimes you are tempted to explore the unknown and wonder what it will be to be what others feel at the moment! But better to get rid of the thoughts and accept what comes the way.

Well done.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Yeah coz thats the only option we've got.. To be good and stay away from temptations 😉
Th.. read more
Some drinkers would say you are better off not ever experiencing drunkeness (or the hangover penalty) and I'm sure some lovers would say the same about love (the hangover is much worse !! lol)
This is innocence I think writ large
Nicely done YumnaKay.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Hahah yes I guess you are right.. Thank you for liking and reviewing ☺
The repetition really keeps the reader engaged and is well placed, I really enjoyed this :) I can't wait to read more of your work, well done :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for the appreciation! It means a lot :)
Many people felt this way before, if not everyone. But, few can put it in such a way that teaches the reader about life before and now. Great write. Tyfs!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Ohh thats nice of you... I feel good knowing my writing has some effect to it.. If not all it did re.. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

11 Months Ago

You're most welcome. Keep up the great work!
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

I will, Mr. Van Dyke ☺

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