Desires

Desires

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
"

Becoming wild..

"
Burning desires 
creeping up my veins,

fluttering heart, 
no longer in chains ...

Oh, why so surprised?
No, I'm not on cocaine.

This is the real me, 
no longer with restrains.

Come f**k me, 
'cause I'm already fucked up ...

until my brain ~ drains.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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This is definitely a change from some of your other poetry; I was a little shocked at your use of the word "f**k" because I so rarely see it. I'm curious about the language you've used in a few parts. "Burning desire" paired with the "no I'm not on cocaine". If you would, why did you choose those specific words? This is a nice departure for you, though I do like your softer side too :)

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Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Well that departure from the normal was brought by the fact that I wanted to try my hand in every ge.. read more
Neville Pettitt

11 Months Ago

Shame but at least a taste of freedom is better than no taste at all.........N
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Hm well yes..😊



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Whoa! Someone really is getting a little wild here. I haven't really seen this side of you Yumna

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Oh oh this side of mine is probably more like your Mr. Pulse one 😉😛 it's sleeping these days (.. read more
"Come f**k me
'cause I'm already fucked up"
Those lines sounded like a rap song, or something like that. You done a very good job. :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Hmm interesting.. I didn't think of those lines as that. 😛
Thank you! I'm glad you liked .. read more
F**k me until my brain drains hahahah...loved it yumna....
Quiet a clear cut advice....no nonsense...
A very different one from ur usual ones....I did have a laugh...imagining it ;) better do it or get lost lol .. kind of msg

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

8 Months Ago

Hahah yeah!!! You interpreted it the right way 😂😉
Thank you for the fun review, Ria! M.. read more
Nice! I like the way you worte this and that you dared to use some strong language. Quite unique indeed.

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Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you! Well its good to be the rogue one for a while 😉
I'm glad you liked it ☺
Quite an interesting write up, I love it! Great work :)

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Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ☺
I like using a little bit of swearing to make a point or to convey a certain kind of raw feeling. Using too much vulgarity makes a message sound coarse, but you've got the balance just right here. When I was in my 20's, I used to work & go to college, very stressed, & I would say that sex was what I needed to relax. This is what the end of your message reminds me of. Sometimes sexual release is the best medicine & the best way to get a fucked-up brain to relax & empty out . . . replacing stress with bliss. Not sure if you are using "restrains" wrong on purpose . . . it sounds OK here the way you have it . . . but the correct way would be "restraints" (which also works). Another way to use this word "restrains" . . . "This is the real me, unrestrained" . . . but it's also OK the way it is (((HUGS)))

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Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Yes, that 'restrains' word was on purpose.. But being a little shallow, I let it be 😉
Tha.. read more
wow, powerful, raw, and speaks volumes, definitely on expressive surreal side of of the poetic line, I like this alot!

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Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ☺
Wow, now she's free it seems & red font too. A delicious & tantalizing little deviation from her usual style & I like it. Keep em coming.....N

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Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Lol Neville.. Just for that moment 😉
I feel caged again now😂
Thank you for lik.. read more
Top marks for doing something wildly different than normal. It is good to step outside the safety zone and stretch your wings. Good write.

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Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Ted! It was good to be wild for once 😉
I'm glad you liked it ☺
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That's quite a shift from what I've come to know of you..great though. Fierce and quite hot ; ) an awesome freeing voice and maybe even thought behind this. I really enjoyed this piece. Starz x

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

To tell you the truth, I got inspired by you to write this... I'm glad you liked it! Thank you ☺
...

11 Months Ago

What a lovely compliment
: ) that instantly lifted my morning. Thank you friend x
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

I'm glad!☺

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