Love Isn't A Game

Love Isn't A Game

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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In collaboration with YanZeros...

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Tiles cracking, the concrete surface in mild dew,
storms raging, my mind blowing, having no clue!
Your words fit perfectly; astonished ... in awe!
My life was a mess 'til you came, out of the blue.

I feel that I can easily be honest,  
you are the one I love, don't be astonished! 
My lone cracked heart has now started to be healed.
I know, baby, from me nothing is left concealed.

Please accept it you really are beautiful. 
If I do, will you accept, for each other, we are suitable?
But your month's in July while I'm December... 
sigh... that rising passion in dying ember.

I do care for you, why are you not afraid?
Oh cruel, cruel man, it’s my heart you invade!
I surrender with no question; love isn't a game...
'twas, but now it ignited like a flame.

Burn my soul, drive me away closer to you. 
I'm already here, awaiting your touch, beside you.
Been like counting billion night stars waiting for you; 
now I can spend an eternity just looking ... at you.



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
A poem with lines alternating first by YanZeros and then by me.
Edited slightly...

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I love this collaboration. There are some basic "love" concepts that can be found in many love poems ("you are really beautiful"), but the combination of all your combined thoughts elevates the message overall. I'm pleasantly surprised at the excellent rhyming despite two differing points of view. I love this intriguing part -- last two lines of 3rd stanza. These are the complexities of the love game that are anything other than (NOT) sophomoric (as one juvenile reviewer suggests). Good job putting that guy's finger where it belongs! *wink! wink!* The best part of this is the dance between the two of you writers -- it's not easy to collaborate like this & end up with a cohesive message! (((HUGS)))

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Posted 12 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

12 Months Ago

Thank you so much BG, for appreciating our efforts! You don't know how much I needed these words at .. read more



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Great job to the both of you!
"Been like counting billion night stars waiting for you" Great line

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Posted 1 Year Ago


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Giullia King

1 Year Ago

She really is, and so are you!
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Lol blushing here! So are you Ricco and Gullia 💜
YanZeros

1 Year Ago

It's my pleasure and thank you you two! :)
Love is about connecting and allowing that connection to happen.. This is just so random trying to develop a plot. You are so good Yumna! I am defeated by this poetry game I started with you! Every line of reply you wrote has painted to why love isn't a game! Okay now I'm dragging my heart back to its rightful place. :)

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Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

Hm how did I miss that?! Thanks, I'll just change that :)
I still love this collab of ours .. read more
YanZeros

4 Months Ago

me too even reading it now its full of passion and im captivated by it
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

Yeah same 😊😊

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