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If

If

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay

If you could only see the situation you left me to be
then you could realize what a mistake it was
to go away leaving me like this
searching in dismay
the lost love that I thought I had found in you

If I had known the real face behind the mask you wear
then I could have realized you were no different
than every man roaming around
wearing the same mask of innocence
while hiding a monstrous reality 
that no one can bear

If I got the chance to live again
then I would ask God to rid myself
of the feelings that could
make me feel the feelings of love again
And I would be sure
to not tread upon 
these dangerous waters
of love again....



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
A simple poem using the maths formula of If/Then..
I suck at maths :p but I suck at life too :p
This place has a magnet.. I couldn't just not write :p :D

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This got to me by the end, as it echoed a not so distant relationship I had and I think many people can understand where this is coming from. Some people truly are wolves under sheep's clothing.

You express much truth and reality in this poem, the feelings of regret and emptiness are finely captured. I think the closing stanza is a statement that rings true for most of us. Thank you for sharing, this is an excellent write.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Jack, my apologies. I missed this review. Thank you for your kind words and appreciation 😊



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You have an interesting formula there

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Well, thank you, Sire. Glad you found it interesting 😊
This got to me by the end, as it echoed a not so distant relationship I had and I think many people can understand where this is coming from. Some people truly are wolves under sheep's clothing.

You express much truth and reality in this poem, the feelings of regret and emptiness are finely captured. I think the closing stanza is a statement that rings true for most of us. Thank you for sharing, this is an excellent write.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Jack, my apologies. I missed this review. Thank you for your kind words and appreciation 😊
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mou
you have drawn the emotion in a beautiful way..yes a maths formula indeed but still we have a control over only 'if' but not on 'then'..wonderful write

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Hey that's a nice observation! Even I didn't think from that angle!! Thank you so much for your insi.. read more
mou

11 Months Ago

your write has intense chasm indeed.. and it's my pleasure..
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

That's very kind of you to say 😊
What a painful formula of loving and losing, and then to the wondering, wandering darker places of the soul. Hoping in the new year that life's math adds up to some ecstasy for you, dear poet.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

What a nice review! Thank you so much for the wishes, Craig! And hopefully for you too! I'm glad you.. read more
An owl on the moon

11 Months Ago

Very glad that you're working your mathematical magic of words here at the cafe! And thank you for y.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Yes indeed 😊
Very nice ... I could tell this came from your deep feelings...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Well not exactly 😉
But thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it ☺
Uday Bhasuthker

11 Months Ago

My pleasure my friend :)
This poem probably touches a nerve for lots of people. A point of reflection for me in the poem, as a mask wearer myself from time to time, is the self loathing that the mask wearer feels about his true face. The masks are who they wish to be, but the masks always fail the more intimate one gets. Hence the rejection when someone begins to discover what lies beneath. Your poem is very evocative. I'm not sure you need the bold text on the if then. The structure of the poem carries that emphasis well. This poem calls to mind "there will be time to prepare a face to meet the faces that we meet" from TS Eliot's "Love Song of J Alfred Prufrock". It almost has the sense of the response of the person unfortunate enough to get emotionally entangled with Mr Prufrock.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

I think everyone of us wears a mask to hide our trueselves(myself included) so that's what I tried t.. read more
Ethan

11 Months Ago

It's a pleasure, and it was a pleasure to read.
~ i think that with the passage of time, our definition of 'romantic love' changes... and our 'deception detection radar' also becomes more powerful... and hopefully... we find someone who has been through a similar journey and is almost exactly where we're at... and we connect...

~ an interesting piece of writing... ~ seems (to me) like a journey into diagnosing the nature of pain inflicted by someone...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

. serah .

11 Months Ago

~ sorry, i didn't follow... :p ~ could ya please enlighten me about what depends on what...?
. serah .

11 Months Ago

~ oh... i get it now... you were speaking about yourself... coz for me... the source of pain is alwa.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Haha okay ☺
Lovely poem Yumna! As I was reading this it made me sad but it's still so beautifully written.
P.S I suck at maths too haha

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Haha is it just girls who suck at maths, I wonder 😂😂
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Beautifully poetic expression of how people aren't always who they seem.
A pouring of emotion but measured and elegant.

I'm awful at maths too but this is a lesson I quite enjoyed ;) thank you, we're all learners at life my friend the key is to keep going. Starz x

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Starzy! Yes I guess you are right.. Thank you for your insight here.. Means alot 😊
Hey hey hey well I won't say anything about math cause I am not good at it myself ^~^ (hehehe) but hey I am sure your not bad in life and any way look on the bright side at least you don't suck at writing your feelings out sweety. Enjoyed reading this piece.
YOU DO NOT SUCK :) Don't you dare say something like that again

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

No they won't 😉
I'm in university.. Actually getting bored in the opd 😂
Luna

11 Months Ago

Oh i guess that's fine than, my bad.
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Ah not at all 😊

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