Weak

 We think that

 we are strong

 that we can

 withdraw from feelings

pushing right through us

 demanding our fullest attention.

   But we aren't..

    We crumble at its feet, 

   like 

  the

  weak soul

   we are.

Author's Note

This was something I wrote about a year ago. Just happened to find it in my long lost diary so thought would share :D

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Methinks we have feelings for the same reason we have red blood - so we're permanently aware that we have them. Little to worry about, more an acceptance that we're not super-human. Perhaps?

Could have missed this, more than glad i haven't -is sharply written, near defiant in a way. Admitting to being you.. and nothing wrong there!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, we aren't. Still sometimes feels nice to have the feeling of having everything under control...
Thank you so much for your insightful words here, Em. Glad you read this (:

[The dark story]

I can so much relate to those words. The feelings are powerful enough to break the metal door shielding us and invade our flesh, proving us weak and fragile beings.
A very true insight.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts here, Atiba! Deeply appreciated ☺

[The dark story]

Very welcome 😊

[Jibey]

But is it weakness to give way to feelings, or it is weakness to keep them at bay?

You pose the question neatly.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think giving in is bad enough... But that is just my opinion 😉
Thank you for your thoughts on this one ☺

[Tony Jordan]

I would concur with this view. Many 'issues' can be locked away in mental chests but like most things they tend to leak out in time polluting the 'sterile' - artificial - state we have constructed. Castles of sand is a phrase in mind.

Good observational piece YumnaKay

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Quite a perspective, TJ! Thank you for your thoughts here! Really appreciate it ☺

[Tony Jordan]

Welcome YumnaKay!!
How's 2017 treating you so far? Good I hope.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Totally hectic! 😑
What about you?

[Tony Jordan]

Pretty low-key.
If I could do those exams for you I would.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha I'd swap anytime 😂😉

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I like it. But it leaves me wondering what 'it' is in this poem. A lot of us have an 'it' that makes us crumble. I think you could enhance this poem greatly if you described what it is for you.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah well, the 'it' here is 'feelings'.. We most likely give in to the feelings we don't want to face... Thank you for liking and reviewing! I'll certainly work on this piece ☺