Distant

Distant

A Chapter by Dr YumnaKay
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Inspired by Gullia King..

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I've heard that distance makes love stronger.. This didn't happen in our case..

It just melted away.. Like tiny shards of glass piercing my heart and finally sunk in.. I can't bear this anymore.. 

I hadn't realized at first what 2 years of staying away from you would do to me. Now I know.. 

The first night without you.. I sat on the porch, looking up at the sky, counting stars.. Making myself believe that somewhere you too would be looking at them.. 

And then it became a routine..  

Looking up at the stars, blowing them a kiss so that the wind would carry it over to you.. I've actually lost count how many stars I gazed at.. 'Cause I could see nothing on 'em except your face.. Smiling down at me.. 

I willed myself to believe that you did care. That you aren't as gone as it sounds.. For you are in my heart still and nothing would change that.. 
 
And then the reality hit...  

You are gone.. You are never gonna come back, are you?



© 2017 Dr YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr YumnaKay
This was inspired by Gullia King.. That is not to say that it isn't real..
Don't feel sad, guys, 'S all good ☺

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The heart and mind hopes that what we see, the other will see too, yet there always comes the realisation that it isn't so. But for all we feel dejected at that thought, there will always remain that flicker from within that they will feel us when we think of them, no matter the time or distance that separates us.
A wonderfully captured thought, that most of us can relate to, having been there at some point in our lives.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Yes, I agree with you.. the hopes are what keeps us alive..
Thank you for your thoughts here,.. read more
Lorry 4.4

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :)



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Well, I've heard this saying somewhere that absence makes the heart grow fonder but then I heard this other saying somewhere else that says eyes that don't see each other forget each other...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Aye, I think its true! Thank you for your thoughts here! ☺
Oh, wow Yumna! I'm so happy and flattered that I have insipired you!! :) This is a wonderful story! I feel like you can keep writing it and make it longer.
"Looking up at the stars, blowing them a kiss so that the wind would carry it over to you." Favorite line!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Sadly, I couldn't go on... Had it been not a real one it would have been an easier thing to do but t.. read more
Giullia King

1 Year Ago

You know me well 😂😂
Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I think I do! 😉💜
One of the most creative descriptions of someone being gone, as the narrator clings to false hopes, so well-described using the "star" analogy. I've had long-distance loves like this & it seemed to be a way to NOT live my own present moments -- such a waste of all the gifts of each day -- I think you've shown us this with the pining away that the narrator is doing. I like the way you show us her realization dawning slowly & painfully.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

This is really me that I portray here so yes it was painful to write.. It's good to know it was effe.. read more
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What's up with all the tear jerkers... I'm sleep deprived so I have no business reviewing...it's beautiful but pretty damn sad...a reflective accepting voice... I don't know I'm rambling. Always beautiful from you. Starz x

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Hah no need to feel sad beautiful! This wasn't supposed to make anyone sad :p
Thank you for t.. read more
The heart and mind hopes that what we see, the other will see too, yet there always comes the realisation that it isn't so. But for all we feel dejected at that thought, there will always remain that flicker from within that they will feel us when we think of them, no matter the time or distance that separates us.
A wonderfully captured thought, that most of us can relate to, having been there at some point in our lives.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Yes, I agree with you.. the hopes are what keeps us alive..
Thank you for your thoughts here,.. read more
Lorry 4.4

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :)
I guess that's what the loss of a loved one can lead to... Get across a keen sense of loss.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Yes indeed! Thank you for your thoughts here! ☺

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